I couldn't see anything really, but I saw the shaped of the figure. It even stood up like a person. I made a little whining sound by accident, the figure turned to look at me. Even though it was dark, I could see its eyes glowing like the moon. It made a loud howling sound, then I knew, just like in the movies, I was only a few feet away from being torn to shreds by... a Werewolf.

It let out a loud howl. I covered my ears and screamed. The dogs ran back the park, scared. I was left alone.... with a werewolf. It looked at me, I was scared out of my mind. I sat on the ground, shaking like a maraca. It came closer towards me. I ducked into my hoodie and started crying. I felt it kneel beside me, I heard it breathing calmly, then it said: "Are you alright, miss?". It was a male voice. I poked my whole head out of my hoodie. He put his hand on my shoulder. I my heart felt as if I jumped off a building to land in a cup of water. He saw my tears and tried to wipe them away for me, but I slapped his hand away. I looked at him some more. He had long claws, long fangs, and long black hair. His skin was a tan-ish color and his eyes had dark circles around them. I ran away from home, was chased by the police, broke the law, became a juvenile delinquent, got chased by three vicious dogs and saved by a werewolf. All in one night? I felt as if I have done the impossible.
I opened my mouth to ask him a question, but before I could, I heard gun shots coming our way. I forgot that the police were after me. Or were they after him? I couldn't think much about it because without warning, he scooped me up in his arms and started running. Honestly though, I felt a little bit safer until one of the guns shots got him in the arm. He howled in pain. Now I was overwhelmed with fear. I felt myself began to feel dizzy, I couldn't tell if the forest was getting darker as we moved deeper or my vision was fading. Soon, my whole body went limp.... I have fainted in the arms of a werewolf.... :boogie:

I think you would really benefit from actually re-reading your own story. There are some quite obvious grammar mistakes such as "I saw the shaped (shape)" or "The dogs ran back the (to) park." Your sentences could probably be more complex, unless your narrator usually speaks in choppy sentences.

As for content, there's quite a lot going on with not much information. Perhaps you've already addressed why she's being chased by the cops or the reason she ran away from home and just posted only this section. If you haven't, I would suggest including that into your story.

Just curious, but I am wondering if Twilight had any influence on this story. The description of the werewolf reminded me of Jacob Black, but I understand that not everyone has either read or drew influence from that series.