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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 09:56 PM
what makes it unique to the historical event? that poem could apply to all kinds of periods in time.
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 09:59 PM
Good point, too many time periods are similar. That's why I suck at history. I mainly paid attention to WWII and even so not too much.
That's what I gotta go in and fix xD is the thing wants it specific and I didn't realize it.
Otherwise how is it? XD
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:01 PM
I'd say it's pretty straightforward.
The last stanza has too many abstract implications. try it simplify it.
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:02 PM
Suggestions on simplifying?
I'm looking at it and trying to figure out where I can throw in some French shit without it sounding terrible.
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Leaa
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03-05-2010, 10:03 PM
Gutentag! Hallo! And Hellooow! 8D
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:03 PM
YO YO YO HOMIE G NIZZLE
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Leaa
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03-05-2010, 10:04 PM
Wazzaaap my brother from another Mother?!
... I fail at gangstah.
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:05 PM
So do I XD
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Katch
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03-05-2010, 10:06 PM
*dances in* gooood morning~ ya, just woke up, 2PM, i'm awesome XD
*fail*
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:06 PM
o_o waoh.
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:07 PM
Nice, Katch xD
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Leaa
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03-05-2010, 10:07 PM
Katch! XD teehee.. it's 11PM here..
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:08 PM
KATCH ZOMGS
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Katch
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03-05-2010, 10:09 PM
lol, hey ^^
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:09 PM
I don't like history D:
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:10 PM
I love it.
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Roo, don't imply that you're going to a better place in death. it implies again that you experienced this personally, which you did not. it cant be wholly particular.
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:12 PM
I am also not a peasant father in the French revolution nor am I dead. I'm writing in such a manner because, as far as my knowledge goes, people were really religious then.
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Leaa
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03-05-2010, 10:12 PM
Noo history is awsome!
Granted not all parts are interesting.. but you can learn a lot from history! It's very underrated.. >_< If we look at our history we could learn not to make the same mistakes!
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:13 PM
and the king was about as holy as one could get.
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Tegan_StarFire
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03-05-2010, 10:13 PM
Good morning:)
Sneaks up on Gutter and Aru and Lea:glomp:
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Gutter Glitter
hail discordia.
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03-05-2010, 10:13 PM
teehee. Lea, history repeats itself.
HI TEGAN!
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Leaa
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03-05-2010, 10:14 PM
Hey Tegan!
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Tegan_StarFire
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03-05-2010, 10:14 PM
Hey Gutter and Lea:)
how are you both? lol,
I is happy because I have a long weekend:)
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DearSweetAru
Dearly Sweet Sugar Treat
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03-05-2010, 10:15 PM
I dunno, that's true. Back then they believed being close with the pope and shit meant you were going to heaven, so I suppose that part would be rather inaccurate.
I told you I suck at history. I'm into English and Art and Computer stuff.
I won't repeat history! I don't wanna cause war and shit and that's ALL they ever teach me about.
I'll fix up the last stanza, I do need 15 lines xD So I gotta have the last stanza.
I'm trying to throw in more historical references specifically... but I don't know events. I'm putting in the King's name @[email protected] as much as it doesn't flow well.
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Katch
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03-05-2010, 10:16 PM
*wave* ^__^
oh man x__x i have STUFF to do today~
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