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morinae 02-10-2008 12:18 AM
Some art. - Edit: New sketch 2/10
 
Critique please?

http://i28.tinypic.com/29mavkw.png
http://i27.tinypic.com/16av9dz.jpg
http://i28.tinypic.com/abiafl.png

I drew the first one this afternoon as a freebie, and the second one a week ago. Any critique is appreciated. <333

Edit: The third one is a wip sketch I'm working on right now.

I don't care how harsh your critique is.

Eserel 02-10-2008 12:20 AM
I think the necks are a little too long.
But they fit the pictures well.
:>
Both other than that,
Very pretty!

RyaLee 02-10-2008 12:24 AM
I can't find much wrong except that the mouths bother me...I like them but I think that maybe you should put a little line or something to show the upper lip because right now they sort of both have that expression of "hmm..."*nod* it's hard to explain lol

On the second one the nose bothers me, I'm not sure about that second line, it might be better without that second line and the nose seems to be too low.

That's all I can see, other than that's great! ^-^

Leona of the Zodiac 02-10-2008 12:51 AM
Not bad work at all, very defined. *nods* I might add on the second however to perhaps soften the chin a slight? And the lips tehre look a slight big. But really, awesome job with them.

morinae 02-10-2008 01:22 AM
@Eserel - Thanks. ^-^ I'll work on the necks.

@RyaLee - Thank you. ^^ I normally don't define the upper lip unless I color it, but I see what you mean. ^^ I'll think about how to fix that.

>.< Yeah, the nose is a little too long, now that you point it out. ^^;
That extra line on the nose is what I use to define the bit of flesh (for lack of a better word) on either side of everyone's noses. >.< I did draw it rather poorly on this one...

@Leona of the Zodiac - ^^ Thank you. I'll try to fix that chin and the lips. x3

thrivis 02-11-2008 12:36 AM
  • I kind of agree that they have that
    "hmmm..." look going on. I think it's the emphasis you put at the corners though, not so much the top lip missing. A little emphasis at the corners is good, but the amount you have seems to make them look like they're chewing their lips. Like :I

    Other than that, they are lovely sketches. I especially like the second one for the soft sketchiness, and the last for the character design and clothes. :D

Leona of the Zodiac 02-11-2008 03:00 AM
Oh wow, that third one certainly is looking great so far! I would love to see what it looks like when it is finished. *nods* Good luck!

Miss Degausser 02-11-2008 05:30 AM
The first one is my favorite. The expression and the colors are very nice. It's simple and very well done.

The second one is pretty good too. I'd make the neck a bit bigger towards the bottom. Other than that, it's a pretty nice drawing.

And, as for the third one: So far, it's coming along great. The arms are a little off. A bit too short and thin for my tastes, but that's all that really throws me off in the picture.

They were all lovely. <3


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