This is the only bit of it I even have out of my mind.

She stifled a cry. Was this all she was made of? Was this all she could take? No. It couldn't be. Her transparent hair fell to the ground. She doubled over. Coughing. White stained red. Blood pooled out in steady streams. "This. . . this is not the last time I will see you. I will. . . I will avenge their deaths--Akirra. . . Rin. . . Damien. . . . No matter what! I will see you dead Kaito!"

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"Akirra! Rin! Damien! Please! You. . . you'll be killed! Please!" So selfish, so like me. Always putting myself, my interests first. I wanted to die. I didn't want them to die for me. If. . . if it would save them, I would gladly give my life. My only family. No matter how much. . . no matter how much Akirra detested me. No matter how pathetic Rin though I was. No matter how much of a nusciance I was to Damien. . . . They were still my family. No matter how dead I was to them. Why? Why did these wretched feelings only intrude me?! Feelings? No! I-I can't. . . they don't exist!

"All of it. Throw it away. You expect to destroy me? Emotions. They hold you back. They hold us all back. You are a nuisance."

"Like Damien said, you are a nuisance. Pathetic."

"None of us ever loved you. I detest you most of all. Worthless wretch."

All said smoothly. All full of hatred. Was this the only emotion they held? Yes. Hatred brimmed their hearts.

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"I never wanted them to die. I just wanted. . . I just wanted to be loved." Such a fragile term. Yet one so strong for one such as her. "I was never loved, was I Kaito? I was always hated, wasn't I?"

"Love. Fuck it. You were never loved. No one in our clan has ever been loved. Cherishing something--someone-- to that point is disgusting. You will see. You are still young. You will see." He laughed. Little was known that he was the one who killed them. It was not known for all who witnessed this were killed. All but little Korin. All her memories erased. Never expected to awaken.

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Wow this is good, I mean this is really good. I have to say that I am horrible at critiqing anything so thisall I have to say and that you absolutely MUST continue. I hope that you will continue because I want to know what happens!! So I will wait for you to continue and see what happens from there.

Wow, it is really good. Though I couldn't really tell who was talking in the second segment, or if it was all one person. Oh...was it meant to just be all three of those people saying something and it didn't matter who said what? Well, if that's the case, then that's really good.

Though it is really good writing. Other than that I can't think of anything to do critique about. Its well done segments!

I like it, but I'd like a little context. It's hard to critique it (is this out of character, is this too dramatic/not enough, does it seque clearly) without it. However, it appears very well-written from what I see.