Is this a good story idea?
 

It starts off with the boy(Hunter) in his village. His father is telling him what a great leader he will make because his father is the leader. Hunter does not want the responsibility so he runs away. The only problem is his father is stric, mean person and will not let anyone leave the village except for a few.
Hunter gets away at dawn before anyone is up. Before he leaves, his sister tells him how she got away and fell in love with a man that owns a farm close to the village entrance. Their father had caught and took her back to the village. His sister tells him to go there and find him.
Hunter runs away and finds the man. He gives him a map and tells him to leave because his father will search here first. Hunter barely escapes from his father. He runs through a forest and cuts up his hands because of the thorn bushes.
Then he finds a wolf, bloody, on the ground. he touches the wolf's side and feels a pain, as if being struck by lighting and passes out. When he wakes up the wolf talks to him in his mind. The wolf's name is Fang and he tells them since their blood met they now share a bond.
Fang is very upset by this, he thinks humans are disgusting creatures with no hearts. Fang tells Hunter that he knows a wolf who was once bonded to a human but they broke the bond. They set off into to the forest to find him. While they are running, Hunter notices that his sight, hearing, and smell have increased. Fang tells him that he gained the abilities because of him and states that nothing could be gained from a human(later Fang figures out he can understand human language).
When they find the wolf named Sharpclaw, he tells them that the only way to breake the bond is to find the Crystal Sword but it has been lost for many seasons. Fang enraged hates to think of spending the rest of his life with Hunter. Hunter, confused of why Fang hates him suggests that they could to this village that has merchants and they could learn something from them.
They go and find a shady merchant who has a tablet about the sword but refuses to give it to them because they have little money. Fang attacks the merchant and Hunter steals the tablet. When they get away, the tablet says if they wish to find the Crystal Sword they must climb through Smoke Mountain, cross the Great River, and get through the Barren Land. Fang says that he knows where the Smoke Mountain is so they start heading to it.
Before they reach it, the merchant confronts them with 3 others. They fight and Hunter and Fang are able to drive them away. They decide to rest that night because of their injuries. Fang begins to tell Hunter how it was his dream it become the Alpha for his group and Hunter tells him why he ran away.
After a few more days of traveling they begin to climb Smoke Mountain. From there they meet a hunter who wonders lost around the mountain. He had been there for so long that he can not remember his name. The man tells him how he was hunting a beast of fire that appears in legends known as Flamebacks. He says they are a lizard like creatures that walk on two legs and have flaming backs. The man soon moves on to catch one and Fang grumbles on how stupid humans are in believing fairy tales.
As they climb the smoke gets thicker and thicker until they can not see any more and they stumble across a Flameback(they can understand and speak human language). The lizard creature scoffs at them for not being able to see through smoke and points them in the direction to leave. The lizard lumbers off and Hunter taunts Fang saying I guess fairy tales are real.
When they get off the mountain they stumble into a village where they meet a girl named Tara. She is impressed that they got through the mountain and offers them to stay the night at her parents house to relax.
The next morning before they leave Hunter realizes he likes Tara and promises to see her after the bond is broken.
As they travel, Fang tells Hunter how he fell in love with a wolf named Shadow and how hunters came and killed her. Fang was ashamed of himself because he ran and did not stay to protect her.
After awhile they reach a gaint river and they figure it is the Great River. The only why to cross it is to swim so they start swimming. As they swim Fang notices Hunter having trouble so Fang lets him hang on to him. When they reach the other side, Fang claims he only helped Hunter because if he was swept away by the current, he would be forced to follow. Hunter does not buy the story and belives Fang saved because they are friends.



Please give me advice to make it any better. (:

I agree with Gary Stargazer. I'm a little confused as to how the Father could be chasing Hunter and not only making sure the sister doesn't leave, but continue to lead the village. Has someone taken over for the Father? Or has the Father hired someone else to chase down his son?

One of my biggest issues is something that only character development can fix, really. Being strict and trying to force Hunter into his duty is not really an evil or even villanous thing. If the village needs Hunter, then it needs him. The Father, what with the praise and encouragment that he offers Hunter in the beginning, doesn't seem to be a bad guy to me. I almost get the impression that he is trying to keep his rebellious children near him for safety reasons. I mean, heck, Hunter runs off and gets into all sorts of trouble.
If I ran off to elope (like the sister) or to get away from my responsibilities I think my parents would come after me too. Generally, parents want their children to grow into men (or women) and keep them safe.
I find myself siding with the Father in this situation, and I'm not really sure that's what you wanted.

I also feel like Fang and Hunter were in the wrong to attack the merchant and steal the tablet. He's a merchant, of course he'll want money for the tablet. He needs to eat too, poor guy. While I don't suggest changing it, (as I don't see any other way to get the tablet short of working for it. Which might be an interesting side-plot, but it's your call) I do suggest not trying to make us like the act when you get around to writing it out. Perhaps Hunter feels guilt over it? Perhaps Fang thinks Hunter is a sissy for the guilt? There's lots of things to play with here and I quite like that you have it. I just think you need to be careful with it so as not to make it 'I'm right because I'm the hero!' and rather 'I'm right because I'm a stupid teenager (or however old Hunter is) and hormonal."

(That all being said, it made me kind of agree that the merchants should come beat him up. I mean, Hunter is a theif and bully as far as the merchants are concerned. I feel for the merchants here and not Hunter, which is why I'm worried about it.)

I also agree with Gary Stargazer about the lizards. They seem now to be nothing more than a plot device, and they're pretty cool concepts so I think they deserve more than that. (I've always really liked reptile-people. I'm glad you have them!)

Perhaps Tara should have a larger role so she isn't the generic love-interest. Granted, you have the whole Barren Land for that to happen. =D

Overall I think it could make an interesting fantasy adventure story, but character development is what I think is going to make or break it. Get to know them a little better, see how the interact with each other and the world around them before writing the story for real. Usually, that can give you a good impression of their personalities and how they can develop as people (or wolves).
You seem to know Fang fairly well. Whatever you did to get to know him (writing out short things, notes to yourself, whatever) do it for everyone else too!

And basically I agree with everything Gary Stargazer said. =]

A good first go-around for plot, though!