December 12, 3521
Dearest Vampira,
Hi my name’s Anna Marie. I’m 15 and don’t know anything about life. I live alone, kind of. I really live in a castle the size of china. I swear the vampires all seem to think this is the 1500’s! Its 3521 shouldn’t I at least get to wear jeans or something. That’s what humans wore before vampires. I don’t look good in gowns! Ok never mind I look GREAT in them but that doesn’t matter. The vampire queen, I just call her miss, gave this to me and said…”you better write in here if you want to live.” ….I don’t get it! I want to live so I’m writing. So are the other 3 humans. I don’t know who my parents were neither does any other human in the world; I don’t think they do at least. I’ve never met them. I live at the center of the vampire world. England, Buckingham palace to be exact. I pray to god that I will live through this all. I’d even become a vampire I just don’t want to die. But do I really want to be a vampire……no……well maybe…..I DON’T KNOW!
Anna


December 12, 3521
Dear Dumb Diary,
I’m Lola and I’m 15. I don’t need a dumb diary to write in but noooooooo miss queen from England forced it upon me. I HATE VAMPIRES! They’ve kept me locked up in here for…….15 YEARS! That’s my whole life; I’ve never even met another human! They just locked me in my room and told me to write so….I WROTE ARE YOU HAPPY? I’m not! I want get out of here! Just kill me now!
Lola


Dear Red Velvet Notebook, December 12, 3521
Hello. Hi. Are you there? Well I’m Flower. Nice to meet you. What’s up? WELL FINE DON’T ANSWER ME! I’ll just have a conversation with my nice pencil. IT DOESNR ANSWER ME! Why doesn’t anyone aver answer me. Go away Mr. Notebook……..hmph I’m don’t talking anything they don’t ever talk back! How rude,
Flower


December 12, 3521
Dear Someone,
Hello I'm Lana. I'm 15 just like all the other, ok the 3 other, humans alive. But I don't really want to write in this book. So since I think someone is going to read this they should know that I'm gay. Well I think I am. I don’t know. Anyway I'm not very interesting to talk to so I’ll just stop.
Lana
p.s. I know I'm going to die because all you want the human girl to do is have kids and I don't want to so just do it and get it over with.

December 12, 3521
Dear me myself and I,
My mom, well not biologically, is making me write in here. I don't want to I'm a guy guys don't write in ‘Diaries.’ I'm getting married to a human I don't even know…….well I know Anna. She’s tall blonde and perky even when living with all vampires. I had her stay here when they made them, the humans, move away from each other. When she was younger I always took care of her. The only difference is that I'm stuck at the age 18 and she’s been growing up. She’s gorgeous now but I can’t talk to her I'm not aloud. Although I might be able to now. I can’t stay away from her much longer. I only see her when I'm spying. She is always the perfect little angel. My mom hates her. I don't really know why. She’s so….different. She would be the first blonde vampire in 15 years! My mother ordered them to kill all the blondes when she became queen. Maybe that’s why she doesn’t like Anna. Well all I know is I am not marrying Lola! She is horrible. Ok well I don't really know her but I visited Japan which is where she was moved to and watched her. She’s a short brunette. Her eyes are an unappealing brown…unlike Anna’s green and brown ones. Lola’s eyes were full of hate. She though on her own was causing it. All the vampires in Japan adored her I don't know what’s wrong with her. All I know is that she wants me to marry her. The other 2 Flower and Lana are nice but I don't care about them as much. Flower talks to inanimate objects and thinks there real. Lana well I can tell she’s gay so my mom won’t like her. There all coming here in the morning. I should go talk to Anna while I can
Alex


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Ok so thats the start of the first chapter then it goes into telling what happens i just didnt type it up yet. Do you think that that would work if i had the journal entries from the people at the start of each chapter or would it be weird?

I think that would be perfectly reasonable -- starting each chapter with a journal entry. Or you could make each journal a short intro chapter to the larger chapter...

Also, I want to remind you that double posting isn't allowed on Mene unless it's been at least five hours since your last post, OR if you're posting several chapters at once.

You can post chapters of stories in separate posts as well, but each post has to be at least 3/4 to 1 page in Word per post. :yes:

I'm going to go ahead and merge your posts together for you. :yes:

sorry im new i didnt remember thanks for reminding me and thanks for doing it.

Not a problem. :D Good luck with your writing!

I think that is a really interesting idea. Vampire fiction needs a fresh kick in the butt and so far I like your approach. This is not taking into account anything about grammar or anything, just thinking about the idea. I really like it. I am already kind of hooked. I want to know who these people are, why they are there, why they must write. It's a really great start.

I like that each entry isn't too long. If you want to start every chapter like that with so many different journal entries, you need to keep them short or the reader will get bored. That's just my opinion.

Also, each entry really seems to be written in a different voice. Great characterization is made through their unique approaches to following the order to write. The font change is a neat idea too to make you think of hand writing differences.

Did you pick the fonts at random or do they fit the personality of the character?

this is a great start. i love the journal entry's i think they add to the story and they let you know what the characters are like. i agree with Ionait with keeping them short.

Well I had picked the fonts for the personallity on word but they didn't have them on here so its just kind of random. Anna is suppose to be in Lucida Handwriting~its like a messier Monotype Corsiva. Lola has Freestyle Script which has skinnier and darker writing the Monotype Corsiva. Flower has Kristen ITC which is like big messy writing that looks like scribbling down notes in class. Lana has French Script, its really neat and curly. Last alex has Pristina and its like really small neat and close together writing.

Right now its just so you can see a difference. At the start of each chapter its about 2 pages of the entries then the chapter. I wrote them all out but I don't have enough time to type them. I'm up to chapter 13. The chapters are only 5-10 pages in my hand writing so there not that long.

It sort of sounded like a bunch of teenage cliches thrown into a fantasy type world, so just reading the journal entries did little for me, BUT, that does not mean this isn't a good idea or that it couldn't be done well. I just think it needs a bit of work.

If the entire story was written out as a journal, I don't really think I'd like that personally. However, starting off with a journal is a great idea! I've read a few books that have done that, even experimented with it myself. It's a great way to see inside of the characters.

However, I do think from the journal entries that your characters would get on my nerves. Of course, journals in general are meant for people to be ranty and as whiny as they'd like, so that could be the point and would in fact work, but it sounds really clunky to me reading it. I think you've got a great idea going and just need to do some work to make it flow better and maybe expand on the characters a bit to make them a little more likable and three dimensional.