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Old 11-26-2009, 06:35 AM

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Dawn Blackheart


Some people are misunderstood. They are at home, or school, and even both. I was misunderstood at both. I hated my life, if I could even call it life. I felt like I was dead. They said I was alive because of my beeting heart, but I don't think so.

Haunted by the path I must take. Giving up everything. My so called life, and heart stops at sixteen, and I can't do anything about that. I am a vampire, but not completely.

Misunderstood at home for being different. I used to sneek away at night to drink animal blood instead of human blood. Being stripped of my full power, but not caring.

Misunderstood at school for having pail skin, and being different from everyone else. Keeping my distance from everyone, staired at for being an outsider.

The only reason I didn't leave was because of my brother. He helped me sneak out, and even went with me sometimes. He was really supportive, and new what I was going through, but not completely.

He was a full blood vampire, I am only half. His dad, and our mom broke up. My mom found my dad, and had me. That was before she changed him, and here I am. The first half-blood.

I have a beeting heart, unlike the rest of the people in my family. Even my sister ahs an ice cold dead heat. We all asumed I was human until I turned thirteen. Thats when the sent of blood started to call to me, it was when I took my first human victum. That was also the first time we had to move.

California to Shadow city, the very next day. They never did find the body of my old favorite teacher. I was discusted with myself, I swore never to have a humans blood without there permition, ever again. Oh how things change.

The side effects to human blood it was what makes my family love to drink it. It gives us ten times more strength than animal blood does, and keeps there skin unaturally healthy. Mine's to far gone I think. They look like angels compared to me, and no one believes we're actually related.

Its hard sometimes. I meen come on. We're a family of monsters. We try to keep our secret from everyone, but its kind of hard to do when we're surrounded by the sent of blood. The blood fallows us everywhere we go, and worse, when they bleeds. It turns our eyes black. Luckily, our eyes are already dark brown. Luckily.

I have to beleive in luck, its the only thing that helps the darkness. I use it all the time. But then theres other threats out there than having a bit of blood. Which I found out one day.

That was also the day when I betrayed my promise. When I started to kill humans I swore never to bite into. I lost myself. I was in big danger of myself. It all started when I went hunting for dinner one night. When I met the BBC. The Black Blood Coven, a bit of a tounge twister, a really powerfull group. The story starts at my house. Right before I went on the hunting trip that changed everything, including me.



Please leave coments. I'd like to know what I need to fix.

Last edited by Ethella; 11-26-2009 at 07:05 AM..

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Old 11-26-2009, 07:38 AM

Quite a few spelling mistakes. The overall plot seems well thought of, but I have to admit I had to read it twice just to understand what was going on.
Otherwise, it's great :3

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Old 11-26-2009, 11:04 PM

Thankz. I know I spell a lot of things wrong. I'm working on it. I'll look it over and see what I can do to make it better. Thankz.<(^.^)>

 


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