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Winter Wind 02-17-2010 08:36 PM

Seven Sins
 
Lust
My hands caressed his face, my whisper on his ears. His lovely lips against mine, his arms around my back. His eyes closed blissfully, murmuring my name.
I want him.

Greed
He is mine. Always and forever mine.
No one else's.

Gluttony
Not enough, not ever enough. I want more, always more.
I want it all.

Sloth
I will not open my eyes. I do not want to move.
For he is gone.

Wrath

My heart beats fast. My face is flushed. I can’t control my shaking. How dare he? How dare he?

How dare he be happy without me?

Envy
I look around. I see happy couples embracing, kissing. I watch with dead eyes.
It was not fair.

Pride
I was too confident. I believed I could have anything. How wrong I was.
My ultimate downfall.





Critique please! ^___^

Sizzla 02-18-2010 03:43 PM

Winter, would you consider this a short story or a poem? I'm leaning more toward poem and moving this to the poetry subforum, but let me know where you'd rather have it. :yes:


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