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Old 05-26-2007, 08:14 PM

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This is.... a story I'll be doing a for a friend. Inspired by her. I'll be adding to it every few days and hopefully will end up with something nice and novel length. I'd like some critique on the writing more than the actual subject as, well... she and I have the same heavy interest in contortion so... XD We know what's going one. <3



"No, stop... Stop! I can't do this!"
"Push it. I want his knees to touch the ground."
"But sir, I can't. I can't push him any farther--"
"I said do it. Or would you like to take his place?"

The trio of voices halted there, pierced by a wavering scream of pain and protests to stop. Tehuti's voice cracked after only a moment, echoing throughout the massive cavernous hallways of the Pharaoh's great palace.





Morning broke, eventually. Not soon enough. He'd been cast from the palace once more and onto the chill, white sands of Hrl'ta. The desert expanded for many miles, a few months by horse at least to find ones way to the outer expanses. Many great cities had been built, however, upon the edges of the great river, Rhaal; Ythurr was no exception to this and the capitol had grown to a massive size and housed many thousands of residents. Mn, but you don't know of this planet, do you. Have never seen the great river Rhaal, nor Ythurr's temples. Think of... Earth's Egypt of many years past. Yes, it does resemble that quite a bit, now I think of it. Perhaps I'll go into stronger detail for you first...

The Desert Hrl'ta is flanked on either side by plains and savannas and to the north are many great mountain ranges which eventually encircle the entirety of the floating continent upon which it rests. A single lone river, the Rhaal, winds its way down from the mountains and through the deserts and plains until it erupts into a waterfall and ends then and there. Cities have been built on both sides and occasionally even include the river itself into the architecture. Ythurr is the capitol of the continent. It stretches many miles and contains the palace of the Pharaoh as well as many hundreds of temples and many hundreds of thousands of people.

The continent, often referred to as Gaia, hovers above a massive ocean and it is rumored that there are other continents aside form the great Gaia yet no one has yet seen much of them aside from the occasional month of darkness as another passes over and blocks Gaia from the sun's rays. Many small islands, however, are known to drift about around the continent in orbit, most of them heavily forested with trees to dwarf any which you have dared even dreamed to exist. Often, when one passes low enough, teams of warriors and workers will take their drakes as if to war and harvest whatever that island has to offer. Often cause for celebration, on the days of the warrior's return great carnivals are held and fireworks are let off.

 


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