The following excerpt is from a freewrite/brainstorm I did for a short story I am working on. I wrote this as a sort of exploration of the narrator's "inner voice." The narrator's name is Benjy White, and he is a 15 year old white boy who likes to think he's "black."

V-Day be one of the best days of the year. All them hot bi-yatches in sexy clothes, giving you hugs just because--now that’s what I’m talkin’ about. I didn’t have a date for last Valentine’s day because I’m a playa. All the ladies be wantin’ Benjy and that’s a fact, but Benjy ain’t gonna be more’n a friend with benefits, if you know what I mean. I keep ‘em wantin’ more.

But some of the bitches just don’t get it. And by some, I mean Stalker Melly. That girl’s crazy, man. She be all up in my face, tellin’ me she loves me and wantin’ to talk and stuff. I told her “Woman, who you think you’re talkin’ too?� But she just don’t listen to a brother.

It’s like this Valentine’s Day I was tellin’ you about. No date, just me. The perfect set up, ‘cause all them fine ladies was sendin’ me candy-grams all day long. And all the others was seein’ how many I got. Now that’s all fine and good. I loves me the candy grams, and most of the ladies stopped there.

But not Stalker Melly. Her nasty ass kept sendin’ me text messages all mornin’. I ignored ‘em, and she sent one sayin’ as how I was mean! Excuse me, I tol’ her, I wasn’t the one sending desperate-ass messages every five minutes. I got other things to do with my time.

Melly an’ me got English together after lunch. The way she was actin’, I woulda skipped class, especially seein’ as we was doin’ Romeo and Juliet. Only Jeeves said he’d ground me if I did that again (I call my dad Jeeves, see, ‘cause he’s as smart as the search engine. Need to know somethin’? Ask Jeeves). So I had to go. An’ what’s the first thing I see but Stalker Melly, practically waitin’ by the door for me.

“Hi Benjy!� She talk just like that, too. All exclamation points.

“Hi Melly,� I answered. I couldn’t get passed her to my seat.

“Didn’t you get my text messages?!�

“Er…no, I guess not. Phone’s dead again.�

“God, your phone’s always dead, isn’t it? Why don’t you get a new battery?�

I just shrug at her, and the bitch finally lets me sit. Just in time, too, ‘cause the bell was all about the room and Mrs. Cofax be crazy strict.

It seems interesting-ish from that, but also like it's kind of.. full of stereotypes? =/
He's not really acting 'black' though, just kind of.. stupid? I don't know. Just doesn't seem to fit, the word. *Shrug*

The words are very straight forward, which is a very good thing. When it's indirect it's hard to follow. I'm guessing a lot of language will be used? xD Sounds interesting enough.

I'd try to tell more about the Melly character, and why she's so obsessed and stuff.

Vappor: Thank you for your comments, I'll try to take them into consideration. It's true that it's full of stereotypes, because he's acting the way he thinks a black person acts, completely based on stereotypes. I'd like to steer away from being fully stereotypical in the finished product, though. Yes, there is the language. I wasn't even thinking about that when I posted it. Melly's an interesting character, and will be much more developed in the actual piece. This isn't an actual excerpt from the story, but something I wrote while I was trying to figure out part of Benjy's character.