This was an interesting read. I certainly wasn't expecting a poem about a door, though I don't know what I really was expecting. The composition was nice, I like how you kept with the 'I' at the beginning of every line, yet I didn't like it in the same instance. I suppose you just made it work for you. I also liked how you embodied the door, gave him human characteristics that were really believeable.
Quote:
"I am the door that watches time
I am the first to greet anyone who enters
I see bodies as they change, and backs that depart
I see faces grow older, and scars faded
I bear the marks that the years have brought"
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This stanza really stood out to me, I love the first line of it.
Good job, overall, well done.