I wrote this while in one of my "moments" XP
Tell me what you think of it. It's pretty short.

This stinging pain
Is the only thing keeping me sane
Tears dripping down my face
Blood flowing down the blade
Now I lay on the floor
Wanting more and more
Of this feeling
Of my flesh peeling
You don't have to forgive me
I just want you to forget me
So now I cry
Thinking about all the lies
Now I have come up with this conclusion
That my life had all been an illusion

Nice poem.The flaw was good and it's nice to hear although a bit of work on wording would make it sound better.

Here is a new one

Mask

Under your mask
Under your lies
Is a little child
That cries and cries

Now you ask
What's under my mask
For one to answer truthfully
Might be a difficult task

Your poetry is beautiful. Very imagintive. I could see alot in reading them.
Good job!

And another one.
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Tonight my sins I retire
I look at all the things I admire
I can't remember the last time
That this beauty was worth even a dime

Tonight I rebirth
To purify this Earth
To bring order to this Hell
On that day you can tell

This is a very good peom.

And here's two more short poems
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We smile to hold back all our tears
We laugh to hide all our fears
Our smiles are just like a dirty mirror
We cry to make the world clear
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The women cry and the children sigh
As the men fight and die
Drowning in crimson blood
Over the land it floods
And the men kill and kill
Killing until they've had their fill

I love your poems. If you want here is the link my mine.

http://www.menewsha.com/forum/art/li...es-poetry.html