
09-05-2009, 06:28 PM
Very calming and soothing with nice choices of words. As far as punctuation goes, I understand what you're doing with the letters S-W-A-Y-I-N-G, however earlier in the in the poem you use both 3 and 4 dot intervals. You should probably choose one or the other(3 is usually standard) and be consistent with that. Also leave spaces after the dots. You're trying to slow the rhythm of the poem down and have "word....word" is kind of defeating the purpose. Adding an extra space causes the reader to slow down just a tad more. But overall well done.
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