
09-16-2009, 01:31 PM
I wish I knew where my poem book was, I have a ton more in there, but These are a few I have that I typed into word documents. I'm hoping that copying from there isnt going to count as doing something wrong. Um, I guess I'll post them one or two at a time, dependant on length, and wait for feedback before posting more. Well, these are the first two.
Disappeared
By: Soriku The Ookami
I feel so unnoticed
I feel so alone
It’s hard to have to sit here
With no one there to hold
The people all around me
Have roses they can keep
But mine seems to have wilted
With petals that don’t speak
I’ve called your name many times in the past
But the reply has always been declined
I’ve sat here hoping the pain wouldn’t last
But I fear I’m stuck here in these times
I thought you’d be my teddy bear
But now it seems that you don’t care
I wish that I could have you here
Even though you’ve disappeared
The Spear
By: Soriku the Ookami
I looked up lightly at the moon
It’s smirking face giving light to the gloom
But then what I saw was a grand black spear
Tainted red by the blood of the years
The tip turned Crimson as my finger was nicked
And the blood trickled down as it slithered and slicked
I followed the line, colored bright by the moonlight
And thought of all the things that had gone wrong in my life
I heard the sound of a gunshot and time seemed distant and slight
I heard a scream as it pierced through the cold grey night
Then I came to find in a last halting gasp
That the voice had been me as the bullet flew past
I looked at the moon as I fell to the ground
Then turned to the spear to see blood trickle down
So I’ve come to find on a moon lit night
When you see the black spear, you’ve just lost the fight
Please give me some feedback on how to maybe make them better.
Last edited by Soriku The Ookami; 09-17-2009 at 01:38 AM..
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