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My ABC's
After all of the affirmations, and attempt to avoid
But now I am broken, bruised, and bitterly left berated. Cant you condone your own critical consciousness? Dont you dare demonstrate your own defiance. Every time you examine me you exaggerate my elated energy Fuck your fickle mind and your frantic fingers Go back to your god given grievances and guilt Hating me will only make heaven shine holy lights on you I wont be intimidated beyond your indiscretion Justifying your jealousy that is juvenile Kissing and killing is the same by a kind killer Loving the most lecherous liars I have learned from Making me the monster of the momentary melee Never getting over the neglect over the oppression that i had to eventually overcome Passing over the pandemonium and persevering Quiet the quixotic manners, Remember the ravaging rumors and raping words Strike it down softly and stimulate my senses Trembling from traumatized fear and treachery Undermind my ultimate slice of your upset Victory is best when viciously taken from the vulnerable Withhold your wandering thoughts of a weaker woman Yelling wont yield the yearning |
Hmm. Overall, I think this is a good poem.
Some of the words seem a little forced though, like you got stuck and wanted to add another word to finish the alliteration effect, so you just tacked one on or got it from an online thesaurus. "Justifying your jealousy that is juvenile" might sound better as simply "Justifying your juvenile jealousy". "over the oppression that i had to eventually overcome" sounds just a bit redundant to me. But other than that, yes, I like this poem. Good job. The style couldn't have been easy. C: |
thats really creative abc's people on menewsha are such good poets, i could never write a poet like that
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