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Lolliscythe 10-10-2009 08:45 AM

This is why Lolliscythe Doesn't "do" Poetry.
 
It’s not appropriate for me to tell,

to blunder, to stumble around my words like this.

Why, I have no right to even report this;

after all, what the queen does is holy,

far holier than I.

But my sheer will, my blathering will,

has caught me up in all this gossip.

Oh, my, me, the jester,

reporting the queen’s affairs…

I wonder if she’ll catch on.

Oh, I doubt it;

I surely, surely doubt it;

she’s deaf in her right ear and in the mind.


No, I don't do rhyming poetry. Deal with it.

Dragons_Willow 10-10-2009 09:26 AM

sounds more like a letter or journal entry really....from back in the long ago days of old! feh. forget rhyme and punctuation. poetry is all about expression thru words. this proves ur creative and storytelling abilities! keep writing!:angel:

Lolliscythe 10-10-2009 04:13 PM

All my poetry ends up sounding like somebody from the 1700's wrote it. It's really annoying. Thanks!

kitsuneneo 10-10-2009 07:56 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lolliscythe (Post 1765199450)

Why, I have no right to even report this;

after all, what the queen does is holy,

far holier than I.
.

I really like these lines. There's something verbally and conceptually interesting about them. Good job. :D


Don't worry so much about can and can't. Poetry is the essence of verbal and literary experimentation. Play with it. :sarcasm:

Bella-Michi 10-10-2009 11:35 PM

I'm not a big fan of poetry that rhymes, anyway..... mostly everything I write is free-verse.

amulet 10-11-2009 02:12 AM

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Originally Posted by Lolliscythe (Post 1765200441)
All my poetry ends up sounding like somebody from the 1700's wrote it. It's really annoying. Thanks!

i think that makes it even more cool. this is really really good! =D

Lolliscythe 10-11-2009 03:00 AM

@kitsuneneo: That was my favourite part of the poem, actually. There was actually two verses to this, but I decided to hack the second one off.

@Bella-Michi: Free-verse kicks structured poetry's ass any day.

@amulet: Really? I thought it made me sound pompous. Thank you.

kitsuneneo 10-11-2009 07:20 PM

@ Lolli -ish curious now- I wanna read the second verse now. I thought there felt like there was something missing. I'd like to read and critique it sometimes. ^-^


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