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Tals poems
Alright its time for me to put my poetry on display. I write new ones occasionallly so keep coming back for more. heres what I have so far.
MY HOBBIES My name is Amber Snaith My favorite animal is a snake I love to read and draw So stand back and watch with awe runescape its my favorite game watch me cause these boys some pain I have nothing better to do than to be on here with you SOMEONE roses are red violets are blue sometimes i wish i was dead i get so filled with dread what do you do when life is sad? what do you do when life is bad? how do you stop the tears? even after many years? its like they'll never end and then around another bend you see a shred of light someone to help you with your plight hes so sad and yet so glad how can I say no and not let my emotions go just when i thought they were gone these feelings make me long to be with you how do I tell you? how do I make you see? how much I need you and you need me? what do I say? yea or neigh why does life have to be so annoying why cant it be enjoying why do I have to yearn for somthing I didnt earn how do I make these feelings end? Why cant I twist or bend? why does this happen to me? why cant cupid just let me be? i love you so much baby if only you could see FRIENDS friends are supposed to be there no matter what and no matter where there supposed to help you out and keep you from being sad in fact there supposed to make you glad but it seems that all my friends are jerks and it seems that they all betray me sometime Misty was sweet and we were friends for eight years before she left me (literally ran away) and brought me to tears my cousin katy I loved her so we were raised together for 18 years and she also brought me to tears and then my good friend who I trusted so much desides to call me names behind my back maybe he should think before he yacks I dont deserve any of these things that have happened to me I would do anything to help a friend and make them happy but no matter what it seems that all they want is to be so sappy SETH o my dear adopted baby boy how sorry I am for things ive done I only hope and pray we are still one I love you so much my darling son all I want is to make you proud to stand with me even in a crowd I want to show you how much I love you I want you to see how much you mean to me I understand you cant be my man I totally see that you and me will never stand a chance to be but please my baby boy whom I love please understand that what I see is for you to be the best you can be all I do is to help all I try is for you now promise to always be true cause you know I will always be true to you ABC'S OF DERRICK A face as cute as flowers Because i always know i Can count on him for anything Depending on the situation Everything will be alright Finally someone to help me Get my life straightened out Happiness surrounds him I cant see how I lived without Jack is not his name nor is it tim Keeping me happy and outta trouble Living life to the fullest Mr derrick is the best No one can best him at being a freind Only my wonderful boyfriend sean even comes close Perhaps tonys around there also Quit staring cause your never gonna take him from me Run as fast as you can and he will still be here with me So totally wonderful Totally awsomly cool Until the world explodes and we are dead we will remain Very good freinds We will be here together friends forever Xplain exactly how you will tear us apart Y cant you understand the connection we share Zoooooooooooooos are a fun place to go LOSS like my heart breaking in two is the loss of a freind like you when I feel the unbearable pain its like im dying over and over again the awful unending stress of losing someone you love best twice I have had this happen to me why do all the assholes choose to be the ones I come to love the most im crying so hard I cant see this screen to post o tony how could you do this to me? why didnt you see? I love you so much and I need you to be Right here close to me I cant bear to be without you Just remember you will always be my boo The one I love the most until the day im a ghost I love you tony and everything about you when the day comes you need me remember who will always and forever be here to wipe away all your tears. You think that I woulda learned my lesson when this happened with Kevin Sometimes I can be so stupid but everytime I get hit by cupid and eventually the arrow he shot breaks through and pierces my heart causing this to happen my open wound to reopen and at this rate it will never heal and I will never be happy enough to jump around with zeal WHY? Why do my friends always leave me? Why do guys always want me? Why is it that im always depressed? Why is it that my life is such a mess? Why cant people just see? Why cant people understand me? Why do I have to put up with idiots treating me bad? Why do I have to put up wtih people not understanding me? Why cant I feel the love? Why cant I get away from the pressure? Why is it I have to deal with everyone not appreciating me? Why is it I have to deal with life being like it is? Why cant you guys see? Why cant you understand? I gotta have sean. Hes my man. I need him so bad. He makes me so happy/ Please dont take him away from me. MY LIFE I was raised as no one should have to be At the age when most kids are watching tv I spent my time reading books I never did worry much about looks When I was ten my parents divorced And at that age I considered it the worst At sixteen I moved in with my dad I thought it was the best idea I ever had I discovered the internet and as you all know with the internet comes stuff that shouldnt even flow through a sixteen year old innocent girls head Half that stuff made me go brain dead I met this guy named Kevin And when I was with him it was like I was in heaven I spent all night on that computer Hoping that he would find me cuter and cuter But alas that friendship couldnt last He turned me into a complete outcast "I never wanna see you again" is the end of that before it even began When I turned eighteen I met Chris He never once tried to diss but alas on our sixth month anniversery of marriage he tried to kill me and I ended up like a baby in a carriage I had to relearn everything and get my life back but hey this is what happens when you get stabbed in the back Now I am twenty and A lot ive learned except for one thing that will always get my burned I have adopted a son named seth and to me he can do no wrong but like a chinese man banging on a gong everyone else can see the things he does and how he acts just like a very spoiled siamese cat I am head over heels for my freind sean His parents say that this is wrong they have forbid us to ever speak not once a month not once a week so I sit here in my embarrassing shame not understanding why i chose to play this game The feeling of not being with him are unbearable but as long as I have tony I know its repairable Tony is my boyfriend now and he would treat me good even if I looked like a cow Tony loves me so incredibly much and I cant wait for the day when I can touch the wedding ring I know will be on his finger and of course on me so my friends as you can see life is terrible to me it can cause you agonizing pain but if you give it a chance it will make it go away again trust in your heart and you will see just how wonderful love can be At times youll wanna die or stuff your face with pie but dont worry to much and do not clutch your heart to your chest and keep it close give it to someone you trust the most. WHAT TO DO? I love this guy his name is Tony. Hes the best and makes me happy Hes sweet and loves me to in fact i seriously consider him my boo WHAT TO DO WHAT TO DO Theres another guy that I love His parents think hes sent from above Because of them we cant even talk So I hope and pray and look and gawk WHAT TO DO WHAT TO DO I want them both and im not sure what to do To make them both my boo There both so sweet and kind to me And all I want is to make them happy WHAT TO DO WHAT TO DO For now Tony is my boyfreind and Im happier than when we were just freinds But sad days is the day when I see sean again Cause then ill worry about what to say How to I tell him what do i say? WORRIES When your worried about the people you love Its like you look down from above and watch them as they make mistakes and only hope they get some breaks so why do you love people in the first place when all that happens is heartbreak i loose all those that I truly want and then i feel like a stupid cunt as i watch them all wind up hurt because they all act like a stupid jerk A DREAM Last night as I lay in bed sleeping I had an interesting dream creeping It was very confusing somewhat horrifying I went to Iowa to visit my boyfriend Tony. All was going well to begin with I pulled up to his house and knocked on the door And when I finally saw him there went my breath I immediatly gave him a hug and kiss He of course replied with the same but then just to make it confusing The love of my life Sean comes strolling up the lane He stands next to me Puts his hand in mine And omg what do I see But him proposing marriage..............to me Now what do I do and what do I say? I stand there confused and a little bit dazed Tony immediatly pushes sean away "No you cant do this" I heard him scream I fall down to the ground not sure what to do As consiousness slowly leaves me until im totally confused I wake up in a bed and next to me my boo My teddy bear tonys hugging me tight Crying silent tears I sit up and pull him into my lap Smileing a little as hes so happy Im waiting for him to clap I kiss him on the lips Hold him close to me And silently pray that This is the right place to be I woke up at that time to look at my phone Looks like his cousin mike Has called me to wake me up for work Now mike I do like Hes always there for me As ive said before I hope this is the right place to be o please my teddy bear tony dont push me out the door. THE BREAKUP Working hard at my hotel I call up my man and what the hell Hes acting like a total jerk Hes being so mean to me at work I got pissed off and told him off had to get offf my phone before my boss caught me on there Omg I cant bear I call up his cousin mike Who you all know I like Well he asked me out What was that about? I love mike so much and he makes me happy I only hope its the right place to be Hes so sweet and his dads nice to I only hope he will be like my boo I love tony so much and it killed me to leave but please im not gonna be treated like a pile of leaves You may not jump on me or kick me around till Im broken and dead on the ground I wont put up with it I tell you now My o my how did this happen how o how? I have went through three guys in two weeks Its kinda sad how bad habits keep I only hope me and mike will work out Please o please tell me what this relationship is about I love you mike my dearest friend When you enter a room the sun comes in Your sweet and kind and never mean In fact Ive never realized just how much you mean to me my dearest one now to you I will willingly come I only hope that life turns out well And that we will work out as well LIFE UPDATED endless joy fills my heart as I imagine life with you O baby lets not part I cant be without you Promise to be here for me always my darling I want to hold you Feel your hands in mine carressing I want you Please baby stay with me and I promise all happiness will be had I need you And I will make you very very glad LOST Theres this guy who I love very much. I got mad at him for somthing he did and because of that weve lost touch What do you do when this love you have wont die? How do you make him understand you still care very very much He used to be so sweet and kind And now its like he just dosent give a fuck I miss him so much and it breaks my heart to be without And I dont know how to get him back LIFE BACK ON TRACK Theres this close friend of mine we dated for a while we got into a huge fight and broke up and stoped talking for a while and now once again weve become freinds hopefully it wont end for a while I love tony so incredibly much I only hope it will last for a while I want him and me to be best friends forever please tony stay here for me always STILL THE SAME Why hasent he changed? Why is he still the same? Why cant he see how much he means to me? Why dont he understand how much i want to be? Why is it that he cant get a clue? Why does he think its all a game? Why cant he grow up? Why must it all stay the same? Why must I hide my feelings from him? Why dont he understand me? DEFIANCE pushing him away as hard as they can all these people who are chasing off my friend they dont want us to be together dont want us to hope they dont want us to love each other how how how do we cope? our love grows stronger every day and chases our blues far away it keeps us strong and together more it makes you sad to see the score o love dont let them suceed dont bend dont heed let them try all they want but please dont let them do it dont let them make us fight dont let them make us hate keep strong together with me and very very soon you will see here we will stay strong and safe here we will be together forever i love you so much and you know this is true so please o please dont let them push you ME Sometimes when life get you down it leaves you with nothing but a frown How do you fix the mood that has accured from several dudes Why cant people just understand that you cant be like your man You have your own style and your own ways and you need to express them in different ways Your who you are and not like them you cant become a lemming You have to show what you are like even if it isent well liked I am the person that I am I act the way that ive been taught This is me and the person ive always been And I will be like this to the end I dont forgive and i dont forget I love you dear one and remember it I will always be here for you hun just like we are one Im sorry if i sometimes dont agree with every thing you say or see But lovey I am me and ALWAYS WILL BE thats JUST ME!!!! THE PAIN When you love someone who dosent care How do you make the pain go away? What happens when you want that person to see Just how much you care about them? Sometimes the pain you feel Increases with every passing moment You just want them to understand That you think about them You want them safe from harm You want them happy And yet you have another delima What if your with someone else? And you cant leave them ITS WRONG no matter what i do its wrong no matter what i say its wrong no matter how hard i try its wrong i cant do anything and get it right im always wrong I just want to get it right so bad and i cant SADNESS AND SORROW The pain I feel is worse than anything. I dont think pain could hurt anymore if it wanted to. This is the last time I plan on doing this. I will not apologize nor will I bend to the will of another. I will take charge. I will show him whose boss. I will not break and I will not bend. I will be the one who will win. You cant beat me and you cant best me. I am the one who shall be laughing while your in pain and hurting. I will not frown nor will I stop smiling. I will walk around with a grin on my face and get on with my life. Tony you shall not make me beg again and never again will you be on my mind. I will always love you but I will not let you control me anymore. I am in charge and here I am proving it. Tonight the spell will take effect and I wont think of you ever again cause I am strong and I am tall and you know what fuck you fuck you all. MY FRIEND Friends are the world to me Some leave me Others ignore me A few abuse me But one has stood by me through it all Hes never left me alone Supported me through everything To me that friend is the best one ive ever had Hes always there for me He talks to me Cheers me up I love him so much If only he would understand just how much he means to me Without his conversation every week I would have no reason to look forward to the weekends I love you and I promise I will be here for you forever CANT HURT ME I may be sad as hell I may be upset I may have lost my best friend in the whole world But at least im here I wont kill myself I wont cry I wont let him hurt me this time I am in control I am in charge Like hell hes gonna hurt me again I have dealt with it before and I will again YOU CANT HURT ME!!!!!!!!!!! NOT AGAIN walking down the halls in school today somthing i was hoping would never happen again occured i saw him.......... walking out the door from class why did this have to happen why must fate torture me like so why did he have to get out of class at that exact time why did i have to go down the hall right then why didnt he say anything to me why didnt he see me Am i invisable again as invisable as this tear that made its ways down my cheek no one notices no one cares theres no point anymore COMPLICATED LOVE O friend of mine how wonderful are you you mean the world to me as i know i mean to you theres somthing i wish you to know but i dont know how to go about telling you how it is so heres my response to that feeling i have I THINK IM FALLING IN LOVE with how wonderful you are your so important to me I feel the pain of not being around you i feel the sorrow of you not being here god how do i do this .....im in love with you....... or at least getting there PEOPLE IN MY LIFE I deleted someone from my mind forever I dont remember him or who he was but i do know i loved him and hes gone another has come into my life hes stolen a special spot in my heart and he will forever reside there my adopted brother is still there I still love him more than anything and he knows i will be here for him always WHY? Why did i have to remember? why did he come back? how could they do this to me? I dont want these thoughts back *cries* all i had was my sorrow and my hate but now my heart feels warm towards you once again AN EPIPHANY He comes to me in my dreams He just wont leave me be How do I make the memorys of when we first met Disappear as fast as a jet The tears well up And I feel all alone I sit up in bed And cry so hard it hurts I sit here and think to the god i worship Why must i endure this trial you have set before me Why do I have to cry and be sad Why cant I just be glad Back to me comes this thought And its hard to admit but I know its true I will never ever be happy without you........ Tony I cant live through the pain of losing you Please come back to my life again and just be my friend. SAM O friend of mine your so sweet and kind I love spending time with you and talking to you your wonderful in how you act so sweet and great together this clan will be the best and we will beat all the rest I have faith in you and me we will rule all of runescape both of us everyone will bow to us and we are to be so happy I love you and you love me and forever bestest friends we shall be |
i like them. this is me being picky, but maybe you could make them a little looser? like some of them seem a little awkward. but still really good. :)
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hehe thanks a lot. they are the way I express my feelings. So I kinda write whatever comes to mind. there not planned out or anything.
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O:! :c This one touched me. T~T |
First... I can't really say anything about seeing as they're just "therapy poetry" and not really true poetry. I know when you read that you won't understand what I mean by it, but there's just too much for me to go through and correct on ALL of you poems and really, I'm interested in getting into another argument on how "therapy poems" are not real poetry.
Just believe me when I say it. ;) As far as your feelings go, they're a fairly okay look into your life, i suppose. |
I didnt post them to get critiqued. I posted them cuz I love writing poems. Ive had a lot of people who say that they can relate to specific poems I write and it helps them also Its how I express my feelings.
Do tell me though wat is therapy poetry? Im quite interested. |
Please tell me you're not starting an arugement... I'm in no mood really...
Therapy poetry is exactly what you said yours were -- simply your feelings and they're just for you. Yes, people can realte to them because they're simple and used basically to get something off your chest. There's no real imagery being used or any poetic device other than in the ABC poem. I was quite suprised you used a real form. For instance in the poem "Why" where you ask all those questions; that's not a very good way of writing because your reader doesn't have the answers and you're obviosly not supplying them. The point of a poem is, yes, to express your feelings but not in such a.. how do I put it... like you just copied it outta your journal and threw in line breaks. Does that make any sense? If not, I can try to explain it better. |
perfect sence and I dont argue. I talk in a rational manner. I am an adult not some child. I appreciate your opinion. I beilieve that everyone reserves the right to them. Personally I just write poems for fun not professionaly. therefore I dont see why it has to have a style or a specific structure. to me that is not fun.
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