This is my Sestina I need a title and your opinions on it please!
Stripping away my steel barrier, exposing the true
Person that lays within me. The one person who never
Hurt me. Pressing deeper into my heart.
A knife filed down so sharp. My eyes deceive me,
My heart perceives me, shall I go on?
Can you understand the pain I’ve been through?

Looking through the looking glass, through
The frosted mirror of my life what is true?
Hearing your voice, you just go on and on.
Never stopping to think, Never
Pressing on the subject that haunts. Using me,
Teasing me and playing games with my heart.

The weakest part in my body is my heart,
Yet you hurt me. You said you would never put me through
The pain the others did. But you lied to me.
I now cannot see what is false and what is true.
How could you press your lips to mine? Never
Did you think it hurt me? You leading me on.

I’m going to keep pressing on,
Even though it hurts my heart.
I’m not going to trust you, never
Again will I see you as I did. Pushing through
My emotions. What I do I know is true.
They all know the true me.

The ones who know me,
Know that I am strong enough to go on.
I can’t though; I can’t get over you that is true.
I can’t believe I listened to my heart.
Knowing full and well of what I’ve been through,
You still hurt me like I never

Meant anything to you, never
Thinking about me.
Can you see what you put me through?
How do you think I could go on?
You took me in your hands and ripped open my heart,
Exposing to me what is true.

The pain, the hurt, the fake smiles,
You will never know what you put me through.
Yes it’s true my heart and I will go on without you unfortunately.

Hey, I like your poem. I think you use the same words a lot though. thesaurus.com is good for finding similiar words that'll spice it up and express yourself better.

Lol, well, if you really want to attract someone with a poem I would go for a rhyming scheme. We had to make poems during class and the people who had rhyming poems entertained the audience much more. And Jehneefur is right, you use the same words a lot. :)

Asides from that, if you're trying to convey a message it's pretty clear...

Originally Posted by jehneefur

Hey, I like your poem. I think you use the same words a lot though. thesaurus.com is good for finding similiar words that'll spice it up and express yourself better.

It's a sestina you repeat words over and over...

Originally Posted by DeadAngel

It's a sestina you repeat words over and over...

Oh I see ;3 well I guess it's ok then

Yes :3 I hope it doesn't sound to terrible...