Hi. I was wanting to put up my poetry for people to read. And to hopefully tell me what they think of it. I would really enjoy to have feedback on it. Each day that I'm on I will post a new poem. All my Poems are copyrighted to me so you can't use them without my permission. And I will know. Most of my poetry comes out sortta lyrical, so if you don't mind that lets go!


Wordless Death
Window panes
Shelter me
from the cold externally
but not from within
I heard you call my name again.

Rain beats down
Wind is blowing.
The storm
is throwing
All it's might
against me
I can't speak.

This is a chance,
I must take.
I know that you,
Will never see me
Fall into
a break.

You are the bane
of my existance.
Bloodless words
excape my lips,
Though I try to answer back.

This is a chance,
I cant seem to make.
I know that you,
Cant see me
Fall into
a breathless fate.

Dead with you, Dead without you

The dark is knocking on my door.
Death is waiting for me there.
And I don't know anymore,
If I can keep it's hungry arms at bay.

I'm waiting for you,
To leave me behind.
Dying with you,
Here by my side.
I'm waiting for you,
To return to me someday.
Dying with you,
Gone away.

Everyday I see your face.
I hear your voice.
It hurts me.
I know I'm at an end.

I'm waiting for you,
To leave me behind.
Dying with you,
Here by my side.
I'm waiting for you,
To return to me someday.
Dying with you,
Gone away.

Bereft of life.
I walk in pain.
You call to me.
I cant hear you,
Calling out my name.

I'm waiting for you,
To leave me behind.
Dying with you,
Here by my side.
I'm waiting for you,
To return to me someday.
Dying with you,
Gone away.

Dark fingers reaching
Covering the light.
A ripped out Heart,
Pulsing in the bloody snow.

Tell me what you think of them. I have several more to go. And would like some feedback on my work.

Fate's Game

Click.
It's done.
Click.
It's gone.

If I could do it over,
I would do the same.
That's just all part,
Of the Fate's game.

Click.
It's done.
Click.
It's gone.

It's all we are.
It's all we'll be.
Playthings of our own,
Misery.

Fate's play a game.
They make a gamble.
We're a game.
A roll of dice.

Click.
As the dice roll.
It's done.
Click.
As the dice roll.
It's gone.

Purther

The Thunder rumbles,
Shaking me to my toes.
Then from my chest
A beautiful sound echoes.
Purther, Puther.
The sound calms my heart
Makes me feel safe.
I hug her close to me.
I feel love beyond the fear.

The sun is shinning,
It's a warm new day.
Purther, Purther
The sound comes again.
Picking her up I bring her,
To go outside to play.
As a reward for being there
The night before.
And again she purrs.

absolutely amazing :3

I swim for my life

Don't worry I'll be alright.
I could be better,
but for now I'm fine.
I swim for my life.
'Cause that's all I can do.

I'd tell you otherwise,
that things are perfect right now.
But then I'd be lying.
So I'll tell you the truth.

Don't worry I'll be alright.
I could be better,
but for now I'm fine.
I swim for my life.
'Cause that's all I can do.

If I make it that's fine.
If I don't I know,
you're here to pick me up.
To carry me on.
'Cause that's what good friends do.

Don't worry I'll be alright.
I could be better,
but for now I'm fine.
I swim for my life.
'Cause that's all I can do.

Yes,
I could be better,
but for now I'm fine.
So don't worry 'bout me.
'Cause right now I'm alright.

Thank you very much! :)

So scream my name!

Tides are going in and out,
that's just like what life's about.
spinning in circles.
dancing in rain.
hope, and sorrow.
joy and pain.

life,
love,
me,
and you.
i cant,
be alone.
i need to,
be beside you.

some things never change.
there's nothing that will ever be the same.
jumping up and down.
screaming out loud!
love, and hate.
death and life.

So scream my name!

without,
love,
me,
and you,
can't,
be alone,
us together,
we have to be.

So scream my name!

'cause things are never the same.....

so lets take this chance,
and lets live like we can.
and never let go!

So, please,
come on,
and scream my name!
scream my name!

'cause things... always... change....

What would you say...

What would you say,
If you knew my dreams were real?
What would you do,
If you entered my world?

The pain,
The hearbreak.
The torcher of his walking away.

What would you say,
If you knew
What I wrote was true?

My stories aren't lies.
The pain is the truth.
Without him I would die.
With him I was dead too.

But with him I had life.
I soared above the clouds,
Higher in the sky,
Then you could ever dream of.

When he said we need some time.
To work on our problems alone.
This Phoenix fell from above,
And tumbled down to the abyss below.

My pain will one day end.
But for now,
I sit and wait.
I try to change my bad faults,
To see him again someday.

He is my Knight in Flaming Night armour.
I am his Maiden Princess,
Who's Heart forever true.
One day our love will be rewarded.
We will share,
The kiss that we've been longing for.
The one that's shared by lovers,
At the first blooms of spring.

So what do you guys think of my poetry so far? I'm really interested in hearing some construtive critisism :) So let me know. I don't care if it's on here or through PMs. Just Please let me know if you like my work. :)

Barking Thunder.
Wind Whipping.
I'm weeping.
You're gone.
I cry.
Rain mixer
my tears,
and the Blood.

I would've painted
The walls.
But it's far too late,
To change my plans.
I'm caught again by Fate.

They've come for me,
These enemies,
of our short lived time.
If I wait,
Maybe my Death
wont be in vain.

I wrap my wounds.
I open the door.
There you stand.
Into your arms I fall.
You see the outward pain.
You almost turned away,
Then you see Death's sword.
It's in the wall,
Where the Reaper struck.

You kiss my pale cold lips
And whisper,
"I will see you there."
As I fade,
I see our hearts joined,
In your Blue Grey eyes.

I hope that this isn't to far out of comfort range here... Anyways. This one is untitled as of yet. Not sure what to call it. So if anyone has any ideas they're more then welcome to express them :)