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Old 10-03-2010, 06:02 PM

:angel:Saphira, an angel from heaven
died in vain
she loved everyone
everyone hated her
a school shooting
brought her death
she loved
until the end
she went to
heaven
only to
tour
Hell
Happy Birthday
You just
Killed
An
Angel


My love,
Is the one I dream about
My love,
Is the one I can't live without
My love,
Is the one I want to be with
My love,
Is the one that said 'I love you' 30 times in 20 minutes


He's the one
Is it true?
Yes,
With those sexy cowboy boots
That country boy hat
That tiny room he calls his house
That obbession with tractors and cars
The way you chew
The way you kiss
The way you ride your bike,
Take pride in all you do
Love me with your heart, mind, body and soul


Tell me, please, Lord Almighty!
What, in Your beautiful world,
Did I do to deserve him?
I love him
I love him more than anything on the Earth
But I love You, Lord
For bringing him into my life


And I pray he will stay in my life forever. And whatever I did won't affect our relationship too much. I miss him already. I want him forever. Talk to him Lord, help him through this rough time. Please let him know, I love him, that will never change. Let him feel my love for him, and let him feel the pain I'm going through right now.
Thank You Lord:heart::heart::headdesk::heart:

Soulless, lifeless,
Without you I am nothing
A heap of flesh
With a colorful name
No joy
No heart
No smile
Where did you go?
Why did you leave me?
I know that I love you
You say you love me no matter what
So why?
What is there to think about?
Soulless, lifeless,
Without you I am nothing
A heap of flesh
With a colorful name.

Last edited by IsabelWhitten; 10-03-2010 at 06:28 PM..

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Old 10-03-2010, 06:31 PM

Your off to a good start, maybe lengthen lines or add some rhyme schemes?

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Old 10-03-2010, 10:04 PM

Yes, I was thinking about doing some of that when typing it, but I wrote most of these years ago, except the pinkish one. I did that one just now.

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Old 10-04-2010, 01:29 AM

I think they'd be really good if just redone a bit. That's always the fun part on looking back on old poetry you've written, you can improve things and what not.

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Old 10-04-2010, 02:48 AM

I don't know, with poems, I down right refuse to redo them. If I redo them I hate them. I don't know why exactly. With stories, plays etc. I always redo and edit those. But on poems I refuse.

 


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