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Old 10-07-2010, 08:30 PM

OK guys, here's a poem I was assigned to do for my English, and was wondering of what you guys thought. Please be harsh and critical, because I'm in a semi writer's block and don't know how to get out of it. But anyways, I'm meant to be writing as a parent guiding my child through a poem on life...
Well here goes...

The “Real World” sandbox
Honey, let me sit you down just one moment,
And think of life as it is.
Are you happy at what you’ve done and accomplished,
Or feel like your life has been admonished?

Oh honey, don’t worry if you’ve not gotten there
I can tell you a secret for you to keep
On how to succeed in what it is you want to do
And count the blessings you have received, too.

Consider life a sort of “Real World” sandbox
Where everyone has the same amount of given sand
Some can create magnificent works of art
While others can take it and rip it apart

You have your special place, no doubt about that
Where you can create whatever it is you desire
Some kids will try to be unfair and steal
But continue building, because redrafting is always part of the deal

You can climb high, higher than the sky
As your family is the strongest foundation
We care and love and respect you for you
And when I say this, I really mean it, it’s true

When someone comes knocking down your castle
Don’t drop down sniffing wishing everyone would go away
Instead, hold your head high and smile
Because life’s going to get better, for them, more hostile

If ever there is someone that tells you “Do this, not that.”
And you feel that it is too risky
Don’t hesitate to stray away from the thought
Don’t be pressured into being something your not

Even though life can throw many things your way
Enjoy the ride while you can
Everything is a new experience to enjoy and learn
Even the times when it makes your stomach churn

Honey, I know it’s a lot to comprehend
But one day, when you are in that sandbox all alone
Think of this and things will get better
Because I am close to you in this short letter

I care for you and want to help out
Although I can’t be there every step of the way
Just know if you don’t know what to do
I’ll always be there, open arms, and be ready to help you.

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Old 10-09-2010, 05:04 PM

Anyone?

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Old 10-10-2010, 02:04 PM

Bah! I knew it. The Poems section is always pretty deserted.
I love it, and I love you! :D <3

 


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