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Nexess 02-02-2007 08:48 PM

Sometimes I Wonder...
 
Quote:

Sometimes I wonder,
What comes after death?
A new body?
A holy land?
Or perhaps a land of fire.

Sometimes I wonder,
Is any of it true?
Can we really be born again?
Into a new?
Is it true?

Sometimes I wonder,
When my time is up,
Will I go to that place?
You knwo that place,
Where everyone is happy and no one dies?

Sometimes I Wonder,
Is all just a dream?
Is it a dream where when the dreamer wakes,
I will be no more?

Sometimes I wonder,
Am I a good person?
Have I done enough?
Did I harm the ones I love?

So tell me this.
Can you answer the questions above?



I did this poem in my social studies class, we were all talking about what was after death or if there really was a true kind of death at all. Yeah it was a bit weird but it took up the class hour when we had nothing to do.

Nema 02-04-2007 06:24 PM

I rather like this, Nexess... full of those unanswerable questions that we all have from time to time. *nods*

Seishuku 02-06-2007 12:08 AM

I like the idea of this poem, but I feel it could be better if you used "prettier" words to describe things instead of common language.

Nema 02-11-2007 12:37 PM

I rather like the simplicity of the language, I think it matches the tone of the piece in this instance, although I know what you mean, Seishuku. *nods* :)

tanarif984 02-12-2007 06:56 PM

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Originally Posted by Seishuku
I like the idea of this poem, but I feel it could be better if you used "prettier" words to describe things instead of common language.

XD, it makes the poem seem like a thing from Science/Religous classes the poem does.
Still real cool though^^

Nexess 02-13-2007 01:53 AM

<<;; yes well i was going to write it as it was in my journal but the words i used needed to be simplified.... believe me none of you would have been able to understand them.

Lilithia 02-13-2007 01:55 AM

Wow, just wow. I love this poem so much. I can relate to it too! Excellent job!!

Nexess 02-13-2007 02:05 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lilithia
Wow, just wow. I love this poem so much. I can relate to it too! Excellent job!!

x3 yes i'm very good at relating to others. <3333333333333 luffs on Litlihia!

Lilithia 02-13-2007 02:12 AM

I want to read more of your poetry. :D

Nexess 02-13-2007 02:19 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Lilithia
I want to read more of your poetry. :D

<<;; Nexie will try to find something that doens't need much editing.

Lilithia 02-13-2007 02:21 AM

Alright Nexy, looking forward to it. :D


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