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Alexandrus Gambino 03-10-2007 02:07 PM

Soldier. Please comment.
 
I'm a soldier on the battlefield
starin' at the blood-red sky
turnin' to the darkness in
my heart for disguise.

and though I don't show my tears
deep inside I cry
wishin' for eternal peace
like love in the sky.

Deji-chan 03-10-2007 03:20 PM

Ooooh, it's nice. n_n Very touching~

flaming-Scorpion 03-10-2007 11:52 PM

mmmm i think you could have better wordin =/

Sapphire Clouds 03-11-2007 12:43 AM

I really love the flow of the entire piece. It's a very vivid picture that you paint. :) Awesome job!

- sapphire

faery*angel 03-12-2007 11:41 PM

I'd love to take the imagry from that poem and draw it...Telling the truth...

Alexandrus Gambino 03-15-2007 10:07 AM

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Originally Posted by faery*angel
I'd love to take the imagery from that poem and draw it...Telling the truth...

yesplease! It would be great if someone made art of my poem.

mor_noa 03-15-2007 01:17 PM

Really nice. :]

Enniel 03-18-2007 06:37 PM

I can just picture it!! :3 nice job, conveying a strong picture and emotion in just a few lines ^^


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