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Arekya 03-22-2007 08:19 PM

Angel and Demon
 
a poem technically caleld dark and light, but based off the picturee I had of an angel, all sad, with pale skin, black hair, all in black, female looking, and a demon with golden hair, smiling, in blue and white, reachign out to the angel,... it's a few years old, so.. here..
Dark and Light

Imagine the darkness in love with the light,

Weary and worn in its frozen black night,

It looks towards the dawn,

A poor frozen fawn,

It shies away from the eternal light,

Staying in its dark den of frozen night,

Wanting to bask in the whiteness,

But ever fearing its brightness,

Imagine the brightness in love with dark,

Wandering away with its flaming bright heart,

Wishing itself to join with the night,

Wanting the dark to come to the light,

It reaches with flaming arms to the dark,

Calling out to the shadow strong with its bark,

It hopes against hope for the darkness to come,

But their story shall never be done,

The ever encircling day and night,

Also known as the dark and the light.

(Basically.. I thought iot up based off a line in a Tenchi Muyo movie,.. the Daughter of Darkness..)

Moocat 03-23-2007 07:21 PM

^^ It's pretty good. There are some things that annoy me, but that's only because I'm OCD and absolutely psychotic. xDDD

But it's a really amazing poem.

Ceridwen_Crystaline Ikoda 03-23-2007 08:25 PM

I like it. =3 Lovely imagery, a little stagnant at parts, though. Kinda hinders the flow a bit, which is why I hate rhyming poetry and it's desire to make you confirm to that exact word that 'works', rather than what word you feel works. =3 Well done.

And I've drawn images like that before, so I don't think it's an uncommon theme, very inspiring. X3

Arekya 03-26-2007 03:49 AM

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Originally Posted by Ceridwen_Crystaline Ikoda
I like it. =3 Lovely imagery, a little stagnant at parts, though. Kinda hinders the flow a bit, which is why I hate rhyming poetry and it's desire to make you confirm to that exact word that 'works', rather than what word you feel works. =3 Well done.

And I've drawn images like that before, so I don't think it's an uncommon theme, very inspiring. X3

<<; yah.. to both of ya.. XD I sorta wrote this when i was.. 14? I think.. << so.. yeah..


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