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Ever Love Me
A little free vears poem I wrote.
Ever Love me By Hiei14 My big brown eyes wheep, but not for me. My heart is bitter, Torn from hate. The deepest hole, ever dug. I've fallen in, A pit of lies. No ray of hope, No golden sun. Only blackness, The night's revenge. My light is gone, No spark be found. A broken heart, Is all that's here. He left the peaces, On the floor. Now all I do, Is clean up the mess. The broken heart, I've held so long.. It cuts my palms, forever on. Now all I do, Is clean up the peaces, And ask myself, Did he ever love me? |
Strong emotions and well written prose. A spelling error here and there but I am not here to hardcore critique. I like it. I think you should try out some of the different forms of poetry. I know there are probably a few forms of poetry that are not commonly used but would work for you.
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