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LadyDelaidra
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04-19-2007, 03:59 AM
Ok, first of all, this is oooold. oo; <333
I wrote it a few years ago, but I've always had a soft spot for it. <33
- I cry
at night when no one can see me.
My tears
Like crystal in a black lit sky
show my feelings,
But no one can see me
I cry
at night when no one can hear me.
My screams
echoing through the empty night
lie still in the midnight air,
But no one can hear me.
I cry
at night when no one can help me.
My emotions
jumbled together show
hatred, joy, grief... love
But no one can help me.
I cry
at night when I miss you the most.
I realise most people won't like it, but I do. XD;;
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xDark_Midnightx
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04-19-2007, 08:42 PM
Are u kidding me?
I loved that poem!!!!
Ur really good at writing them
Even tho I shouldn't be judging b.c of only one work..
but still..
continue?
Did u write it when u were sad?
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Cyzzane
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04-19-2007, 10:16 PM
I really enjoyed that poem. It was very lyrical sounding and flowed nicely. The words chosen really bring the poem to life.
Great job!
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Amelie
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04-20-2007, 02:59 AM
I really enjoyed that. That pain was more than evident but not to overstated. Sorry if that sounds a little vague or like an oxymoron but i don't really know of any other way to put it.
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upinthetrees
Dead Account Holder
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04-22-2007, 02:35 AM
There was a lot of imagery in it. I think it was really good.
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sushi_mew
(。⌒∇⌒)&...
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04-22-2007, 09:06 PM
I loved it a lot. Very soft words you used--to me at least -sweatdrop-
You should keep on posting more. ;D
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