Quote:
once in heaven lived a angel
she was nice and very thoughtful
she went to earth and blessed the planet
for the love and balance of the elements
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inconsistent audience. how about use a word that is more advanced than "nice"? how about a different word than "lived"? how about you describe "angel" instead of just giving it to us? how about you add more details? how about if you want to write such a dumbed down poem, not use the word "elements"? How about you consider your audience? How about make your last line fit the meter? how about aim for perfect rhymes?
sorry if that seemed to harsh. i'm very critical XDD