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Old 07-10-2007, 03:13 AM

As Memories Fade


I keep that picture in my heart, worn and fading,
I keep that picture in my mind, a clip of hope,
I keep that picture locked in my soul, misplaced and void,
I keep that picture in my heart, so I might cope.

I fear I lost you, that the remnants burned away in my mind of four,
Image so weak and distraught, a bare face, stolen reminiscence,
Hacking your way in, breaking through the pungent surface, taking a tour,
I watch the incense burn, I watch your depiction die away, I watch the last memory disintegrate like once sweet sugar dissolved by blistering water.

Final step, final sip of blood kept my heart beating,
Final fall, hospital lights rushing by, final smirk nurse over my head,
Final line, medicine drip don't need treating,
Final beat, mother's teary eyes, daylight fades laid on bed.

I keep that picture in my heart, worn and fading,
I keep that picture in my mind, a clip of hope,
I keep that picture locked in my soul, misplaced and void,
I keep that picture in my heart, so I might cope,
I keep that picture in my tomb, smeared in blood.
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Old 07-12-2007, 06:01 AM

Oh~ Very dark and morbid. But nicely so. And the rhyme scheme adds to the creepy feel by giving it that sing songy tone. I envy how you can write with a rhyme scheme. Those things drive me insane, but I love reading poems with them.

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Old 07-12-2007, 08:37 AM

Thnxs
it's really hard to make poems ryhme [email protected]
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Old 07-12-2007, 08:18 PM

Oh wow..... :shock:

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Old 07-13-2007, 04:43 PM

wow. really intense. brilliant <3 :o

 


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