
07-18-2007, 08:58 PM
Here is a poem that a good friend and I worked on together.
I'm not sure if it's quite finished, but I just wanted some feedback on it.
(My friends wrote the last paragraph, so that might explain why it doesn't exactly flow with the rest of the poem)
Lies,
Hidden feelings,
unimaginable sadness.
unexplainable.
A story behind each face
unknown, unheard, untold -
irreversible.
Secrets -
of love, of hate,
of truth.
unthinkable.
Masks cracked and worn,
of false happiness,
each mask threatening to break.
vulnerability.
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