Well when I get angry I do one of two things, break stuff, or write a poem about it. So here are my two angry poems.

Truth!

You want people to tell you the truth,
and when they do you can't handle it.
So you yell with words not fit for writing.
And you yell some more I try to retaliate.
your so caught up in thinking everyone likes you
that you don't even notice how much of a brat your being.
Well I told the truth, and I'm glad I did.
So you can curse all you want,
you just won't notice your friends slipping away.
I told you the truth and you can't take it.
I give back what you dish out.
I can handle the truth.
That's the difference between you and me.
A true friend .vs. a back stabber.

Hostility (waring: Cuss words)

Bitch: Not even directed towards you and you flip!
Annoyed: You say you are. You say I know what I did, but it’s not my fault. You just don’t want to talk to me.
Ignore: What we both are doing to each other.
Friends: I thought we were. But a real friend wouldn’t tell me to ‘Fuck off!’
Irritated: I am for the air around us is tense.
Apology: You offer none. When it all started with your overreacting.
Ending: I can’t think of one, or why. But something certainly is ended.


ok, now tell me what you think, and try to be nice. Please.

oh, well you can tell you were certainly upset. I like the second one a lot, and how each line was started with a strong word of feeling, or just a strong word. Nicely done.

Hey. xP

I don't like the first one much. Mostly because - well, while it's very expressive, it's not really a poem. It reads like a letter, or just speech - take out the line breaks, and it's just that.
It seems like a paragraph broken into lines just so that it looks like a poem.
You didn't take to your advantage at all the fact that you are writing a poem - in a poem you should try to express emotion beyond just that which the words are saying - and the best way to do this is with the structure of the poem.

For example, a free-verse poem in which you are writing about confusion may be written in a very confusing, staggered, and jumbled manner. A poem about forgetting could have long blanks in it. A poem about being nervous could have hesitant pauses. Or a poem that's about childhood may be written very simply, with short words, and so on, so forth.

Which is why I like your second one. The pattern of a word, and then an explanation - I think it works. It looks like a term-definition thing, but specific to your situation - which seems like you're trying to clarify things, to explain to your 'friend' what went wrong and how you feel about it, word-by-word. I think this one, more than the first, shows that you're trying to reach this person somehow. While it's not my favorite type of poem, I think it's a really neat and effective format.

I'd only suggest rearranging the order of the words a bit? Of course, I'm not sure what happened, so I'm just guessing - but it should try to follow perhaps your line of thinking during this whole situation. Like it seems to be that 'friends' should come earlier - or, actually, perhaps almost at the very end, before the 'ending' line.
(So, I would place them as: Bitch -> annoyed -> irritated -> apology -> friends -> end. Of course, like I said, I don't know what happened, so if the way you put them is how you want them to be then I understand. xD I just thought 'irritated' looked a bit dull right after the 'friends' - I mean, after being told to 'fuck off' by your friend it seems like you should be more than just irritated.)

Anyway, good luck!