It's an older work of mine, what do think of it?

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Mist coats the air
Suffocates trees, black in despair
Hoar covers the ground
Freezes the earth, eternally bound
To bear the pain and blood sealed within

Darkness suppresses the light
Summons shadows with sinister might
Silence engulfs the noise
Of solitude's dying voice
That weeps heavy tears forever griefing

Fear distorts the countenance
Blurs the world in thine eyes' glance
Terror paralyses the limbs
Chains them with steel cold and grim
Thus thou shalt stop hoping and just give in

Panic overwhelms the heart
Stimulates a fierce fever to start
Lunacy spreads out from the core
Reason will dominate thy head no more
Raise thy hand, bring it to an end...be bleeding

For this is true relief...

Does noone have a comment, a critic? :?

Hmmm, well here's another poem...

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The last night
Blackthorns bloom
A haze falls gently
Embeded in gloom
And smooth twilight
The world slumbers

Aroused by no sorrow
Coated in silence
Fearing tomorrow
That will bring tears
Far beyond numbers

Still dawn is far
No light is seen
Not a single star
Defeats the mist
And smooth twilight

I lean my head back and absorb those last moments of freedom...

*chuckles* I normally don't read poems and comment on them, because mainly I'm terrible at it. xD

Anyways
I really loved your first one. x3 It kinda reminds me of one of my characters. xD

They're so dark and pretty. x3

Thank you. ^^

Does anyone else want to leave a comment? O.o Please? xD