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LadyJaime
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11-08-2007, 03:57 AM
I'm an aspiring writer as well poet by nature. Most of my poems are related to people that I known, compaaring their behavior and personalit alike with nature itself.
I would appreciate feedback if possible. Most of these poems are dedicated to another person so they're copyrighted under my real name. Im going to post two poems - the first one is dedicated to my former best friend and the second one is dedicated to my mother's sister (my aunt) which was read at her wedding.
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LadyJaime
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11-08-2007, 03:58 AM
Nature of Friendship
Dedicated to Kelly Boyd
How did I hear thy name...
When the wind blows or the pond rippling all around
probably the soft breeze near the ocean
Yet I were never near them both...
But I could hear thy name all around me
As I approaches a soft-smelling rose...
I could smell you; Yet hear your name
I wonder why could I...
It is the nature surrouding
whispering your name so quietly and serene
That I could feel the words passing through my soul
I approach a willow tree & sat underneath it
listening to Mother Nature's sounds...
Your name is very sweet as morning dew touches the First petal
I find it very lonesome without thee
My heart was whispering thy's name...
To the wind like a soft rose standing beautifully
under the sunshine
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LadyJaime
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11-08-2007, 03:59 AM
A Couple's Love
Dedicated to my Aunt Diane and her Husband Bobby
Across the dewy grass
Through the breezy air
A love came in a pair
From a man of sensitivity
A woman of elegant praise
Through the time of love and age
We will dance this age-old match
And be known as the World's Greatest Couple
In our families' hearts
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LadyJaime
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11-08-2007, 04:02 AM
You guys can post now if you wish ^-^
If possible, I would like positive feedback instead of the negative but I know Im asking for too much.
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ForkoFried
⊙ω⊙
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11-09-2007, 04:07 AM
I liek them, the first one more-so,
they're better than mine, lawl
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LadyJaime
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11-14-2007, 02:42 AM
Thanks ^^
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