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Old 11-14-2007, 03:29 AM

Honestly
By: Honestly, truly, completely hurt poet-girl

To be honest
I don’t know anymore
I said I loved you,
More than once.

You’ve said the same to me,
Do you mean it?
Honestly, truly, completely
Do you love me?

You love her to,
More than me.
So why don’t you forget me?
Stop playing games with my heart

How do you live with yourself?
Everyday, you lie to me
“I love you”
Yeah right, “Well I hate you”

Have fun alone
With her
Let me rest in piece
I don’t need you anymore

To be honest
I know now
I said I loved you
I now take it all back

I hate you
Go away, from me
Love her, do it honestly
Love her more than me, honestly, truly, completely

I don’t need you anymore
Leave me alone
This is my goodbye, to you
I bid five more words
Forget me, honestly, completely, forever


The Real Me
By: Honestly, truly, completely hurt poet-girl

Open your eyes
Look inside
Find the real me
Am I what you want?

Are you alone
In this world?
Look for me
I’ll comfort you

Look inside me
Am I what you wish I’d be?
I hope I am
Look for the real me

My smile is a mask,
My emotions in a tilted bottle
I’m unstable
Look for the real me

Are you real?
Am I real
Are they real?
No, it’s all a lie

We do not exist
We are but a dream
Fake, in god’s eyes
A mistake

Are you real?
Yes
Am I real?
No

I’m the mistake.
I’m fake.
Still but a dream to be made real
Still to be found is the real me.


UNIQUE
By: Honestly, truly, completely hurt poet-girl

They laugh at me
A sharp pain
when they say I'm plain
"I'm just like everyone else"

But I'm not,
I'm different.
Like a rare shell on a beach
I'm different, unique.

Like a rushing river in a dessert
I can save lives if I wanted to.
I'm creative not plain
My imagination un-slain

I'm not like everyone else,
With opinions as much their own sun.
My attitude sharp like a scolding voice
I'm as my own as my name; completely mine.

So, no I'm different,
Not like anyone else.
Strike down those who don't believe
'Cause as I've said I'm as my own as my name
so totally and completely my own


WHY?

You steal my heart,
Make me feel loved
Then tear it up into pieces
I’ve cried my last

My tears were for you,
You made me cry
So rot in hell
I hate you

Why do you haunt me?
Why do I love you?
Why do you lie to me?
Why does god hate me?

I hate you
Don’t I?
Get away from me
I hate you,
I know I do.

So why can't I get over you?
You intoxicate me
To no end
Like a plague
I can't get over you.

iViolent
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Old 12-07-2007, 11:06 PM


I am not oppose to negative writings, but when they're just thoughts put together, that doesn't make things the best.
In your poems you want to express your feelings, but you should make sure it explains everyone.
Like..how you feel, why you feel it, what makes you feel it, how you react, etc.
Also, I wouldn't use so many of the same words, try getting out a thesaurus and seeing other words with that meaning.
Still, great job, you have talent.

 


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