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Old 01-08-2008, 11:55 PM

Time
I have this hate inside
And it is eating at my heart
This hate that is inside of me
Is ripping me apart

I know you want to be close to me
As should a mothers' heart
But could you understand with me
We can't have every part

Some times i love you so much
With all that is my heart
But when you push too close to me
It's just too much, we part

The closer you try to push yourself
Tighter in my space
I feel i have to push you back
To keep my own "Self Space"

When you cried, it made me hate
Myself so much it hurt
Then when you yelled and screamed at me
All my self-hate grew worse

You need to understand with me
That love's a complex art
But yours and mine are far too strong
To be held in just one cart

When you tried to make it right
It worsened, sad but true
You needed to let me find myself
So I wasn't so mad at you

you must understand, this day and age
Teens must feel self sufficient
And mothers must relax their grips
To make this plan proficient

I know you love me with all your heart
You told me when you'd cry
But if you don't step back a bit
My part of the live shall die

This fragile glass relationship
Is hanging above sharp rocks
You must learn to hold back a bit
Before the damn thing drops

Hanging by a tattered thread
That was torn up my self hate
I need some time away from you
To get some emotion off my plate

I'm sorry if i hurt you
And even that you'd cried
I wasn't trying to hurt you dear
But me, I was hurting inside

NO, you cannot help me with this one
It is mine and mine alone
I need some time to help myself
And crush my large hate stone

Eventually I'll get over this
Don't worry I'll be fine
And in a while, you wait and see
All i need is time

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Old 01-09-2008, 12:04 AM

You may be new here, but it's against the rules to double-post. Please get a mod to delete your post. If you have something to add about a post then you can edit it. ^.^

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Old 01-09-2008, 12:29 AM

it's good!
*sniffle* so pretty and well written.
but the last sentence in the 4th stanza( if that's what it's called) could be altered a bit.

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Old 02-09-2008, 05:17 AM

It's good.. it reminds me of some stuff I went through awhile ago..

 


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