Here is some poetry I've written over the last few years. Please let me know what you think of it! ^.^

Soaring

Like an eagle flying high,
I am soaring through the sky,
Not in body, but in mind,
My imagination is hard to bind.

Haiku

I am never still
Currents and wind make me move
I am the ocean.

The wind blows the trees
The flowers sway to and fro
Nature's quiet dance.

Kai is the ocean
Free to do as he wishes
Flowing like the sea.



The Midnight Game

The moonlight moves across the waves,
In a beautiful dance,
The water it seems the moonlight saves,
It'll fool you with a glance,
The way it moves with such joy,
It's image never the same,
It plays on the water, like playing with a toy,
It is the midnight game,
Like phantoms playing a silent song,
The moonlight strums the waves,
For the entire night long,
Until, to day, night caves.

They're a good start! I think you've got a wonderful base and could expand to find a style niche of your own, the last line of Soaring is an ingenious end and Midnight Game is very imaginative ^.^

You've got the careful rhyming down, but the lines need a little more flow between them. You can always stray a little from exact grammar to get things to sound right line to line, and there should be a natural pause anywhere you make a line break.

If you read your poem sections over and over in your mind, you'll often find, the words that make it keep a steady flow, then you can delete and tweak till it's just right and so! :o

They're lovely poems! Keep posting!