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Guise 01-21-2008 11:30 AM

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- Welcome! -

Welcome. I've finally decided to set myself a challenge. Why not gain my mule a spiffy post count at the same time, eh? ;]
At any rate, this is my Drabble. It'll be purely continued by this account, since it's neglected far too often!
My current list is seen below, and all past lists will be listed as well - but they'll be referred to by nicknames I give them, rather than listing the items they included as well!
Anyway, without further ado, let's continue to the list!

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- Updates -

o1.23.o8 - First day of midterms has officially passed us by! =D
___-#26 [Breakable] started.
o1.22.o8 - Heath Ledger died! o.o'
___-#52 [Machine] completed.
o1.21.o8 - Challenge started; list posted!
___-#74 [Alone] started & finished.

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~*note: this Drabble was posted previously by magnusvale; they found it here.
- Current Drabble -

____________[ Key: Green Bold = Poem | Dark Red Bold = Story ]

Obscurities Ãz la Carte

o1. Crash
o2. Dim
o3. Futile
o4. Erratic
o5. Loved
o6. Soft
o7. Hold
o8. Shackles
o9. Broken
1o. Precious
11. Odds and Ends
12. Tea
13. Twisted
14. Echo
15. Soothe
16. Fight
17. Naked
18. Push
19. Alive
2o. New
21. Born
22. Murmur
23. Devious
24. Isolation
25. Starve
26. Breakable
27. Winter
28. Ignore
29. Color
3o. Grace
31. Belong
32. Choke
33. Reach
34. Difficult
35. Heat
36. Veneer
37. Fall
38. Nightmare
39. Contagious
4o. Good riddance
41. Goodbye
42. Scarred
43. Last Dance
44. Burn
45. Steady
46. Monster
47. Voodoo
48. Shine
49. Intent
5o. Camping
51. Grave
52. Machine
53. Destination
54. Nowhere
55. Garden
56. I know
57. Dust
58. Dream
59. Destiny
6o. Spring
61. Sigh
62. Fingertips
63. Waiting
64. Playboy
65. Revenge
66. July
67. Desire
68. Free
69. Celebration
7o. Stars
71. Morgue
72. Space
73. Whitewash
74. Alone
75. Coma
76. Letters
77. Phone Call
78. Music
79. Silence
8o. Cards
81. Emblem
82. Elephant
83. Monopoly
84. Reality
85. Serenity
86. Bone
87. Chalk dust
88. Manuscript
89. Ink
9o. Perfection
91. Ring
92. Drive
93. Missing
94. Full Moon
95. New Direction
96. Breathe
97. Pulse
98. Hope
99. Light
1oo. Dark

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Guise 01-21-2008 11:41 AM

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List of Previously-Completed Drabble Lists
N/A

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List of Possible Characters
These are my personal pre-fabricated characters that are purely my own, and I'd like that to remain that way. Please respect my voice and choose not to steal.
~*note: there's a decent chance that none of these will appear in some Drabbles; depends fully on my mood and inspirational pull. In order to know what kind of person they are, you must read the Drabble[listed beneath their name] that they're in. No spoilers for you! :]

o1. Faeldin Crosswing
o2. Taesrin
o3. Rehkar
o4. Rallen
o5. Eldarén
o6. Aruze
o7. Arlen Shadow
o8. Seir
o9. Evaelmyre
1o. Arevenym
11. Aesridil Deylen
12. Kaevyn Eld'Anu
13. Isalea Ad'Theri
14. Persephae
15. Caiele
16. Jakiel
17. Daelire Ka'Saariel
18. Dilya Ravenstorm
19. Athaert
2o. Ivesse
21. Inaryka
22. Hazifya
- Key -

♂ = Male
♀ = Female

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Guise 01-21-2008 09:20 PM

74. Alone
Free Write


_____Ginger Lansley sat on a bench on Friar's Dais, the local outdoor platform that was rumored to once have held the recesses of holy orders - prior to the local church's construction, during the original settling of Narthem. Breaking off a piece of her soft pretzel, she tossed it to the ravenous pigeons nearby, and finished her own portion without much of a second thought. It had been seven months to this date that she'd came to Narthem, and it certainly was pleasant enough for her to stay that long; but she knew, like all wondrous things that she once possessed or experienced in life, that she would soon have to bid farewell to the quite little town. Ginger stood just then, fastening her pea coat in one swift motion.
_____Her hair was a haphazard mess; a sloppy bun had been formed with a worn hair tie, tresses of strayed auburn hither and thither. Expelling a sigh, she began to saunter out of sight of Friar's Dais, the morning just beginning with the first rays of sunlight. A smile formed on her thinning lips, laughter evident in her Alice-Blue eyes. Today was as good of a day as any other to just... disappear. Surely, it was the only option she had - he would be coming for her, and a reenactment of Ravys was not desirable; after the massacre that had been ployed, she didn't want to risk any more lives of innocents. Ginger had relocated about twelve hundred miles away from Ravys this time; yet, somehow, the plain folk of Narthem hadn't heard of the happenings so relatively close. At first, pessimism had told her to once more run tens of thousands of miles away, yet she knew that he would be looking for her farther away, and wouldn't truly expect her to be so bold as to stay local.
_____Spreading her arms in a deep yawn, Ginger Lansley proceeded to walk, until she came to a rough, steep set of stairs carved into the cliffside. These led back toward Narthem directly; Friar's Dais was more distant, and oddly enough very separate from the present church of St. Laurel.
_____A shudder of thrill escaped her broad shoulders, making her shiver. It was the dead of winter, and although the small New England region was renowned for its amount of snowfall, not once had the graceful powder fallen upon these barren lands. Ginger produced a small flagon of gin from her coat, and took a swig before jogging down the length of the stairs, a burning sensation vibrating through her upper chest.
_____Once she reached the penultimate step, yet another chill emanated from her shoulders, making her squeal this time. Covering her mouth with her roughened hands in an effort to quiet herself, Ginger continued farther along, this time in a less direct sense; her primary goal was to stray westerly from Narthem, and thus she walked a bit off of the narrow trail leading toward its forests. Here she would lose herself from this small world; here she would find solace after a life of perilous running, surely; while these thoughts ran through her mind, however, she couldn't help but remember him - his fury, utter hatred, and disgust. A sigh once more escaped her now-pursed lips. Terror gnawed at her insides; but she attempted to keep a steady head, and proceeded forward, further into the enveloping shade of Narthem's northernmost forests.

Guise 01-22-2008 11:06 PM

52. Machine
Poem


Corrupt, Incorrigible;
Ersatz and strayed
From the loins of man,
He walks on his ankle,
Calf-deep in crusades.

In the here and now, we speak,
Of dares to which we're owed
A glance; a horrid opportunity
To view the precise technique -
As, for once, it can't erode.

Hither we speak, thither we are:
Suddenly, I imagine, we've come too far.

Guise 01-23-2008 06:38 PM

26. Breakable
Free Write


_____It has occurred to me in the past, but I never considered it as anything more than an assumption. True, his mother ignored the traces of blood, ignored the look of fear in his eye... But, if anyone were to be in her situation - equally as shielded as she, and equally shielding towards her son - wouldn't they react the same, with the same stamina for pain?
_____But I digress; it's none of our concern any longer. Both of them did this to themselves, and each should pay for the misery bestowed upon them in return for our own suffering. We were the common people effected by his wrongdoings - we were the numerous that loathed her for silently refusing to correct him. Yet can we do much besides speculate? Can we expect ourselves to do any better, once more? This question arises far too much for my own liking, but it's vital to the situation.
_____Had we expected his most recent outburst, things would have been quite different - I can guarantee that much for sure. Instead, the officers had told us to let down our guard; they explained that he would be shipped off to the Lanyard Prison like his father. All would be well, and her forebodings of just standing by would once more become a healthy habit. Regardless, he wasn't quite right for going through with the massive slaughter. In this small town, domestic animals aren't kept for mere amusement; they're our friends, our guides - and for those like Mrs. Treddell, our sole family members.
_____The riskier question, of course, is why did he bite into them so... viciously? It certainly wasn't humane, and he deserves every abusive remark he gets when he's sent away. His mother, though... So loyal, so forgiving... Will she be able to bear it, or rather see herself be hanged? Pitifully, the latter will probably be most likely - therefore, a few of the women from the Club, as well as myself, have chosen to attempt a mutual check-in on her practically hourly; I can only hope that that prevents the terrors that escape her from damning her own flesh...


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