It may seem a bit childish but my book is about 6 teens who go to the mall for a normal shopping day when a meteor hits the mall and causes subatomic mutation within them, giving them certain powers. Yes it seems a bit between superman and fantastic 4, but in this case it deals with more real life situations, the lead character is gay and is kicked out of his home, the setting is in my hometown, and the friends are based upon my friends, attitude and all. I would love to hear what everyone thinks about my book... but please keep it constructive critisism... i dont want to have to report peeps for being mean and cruel lol ^.^

That actually sounds pretty interesting. What sort of powers did you have in mind for them?

The only suggestion I have is to be sure to do research to make sure the powers are working accurately for the situations... and, speaking of situations, I'd highly recommend thinking through overly-dramatic backstories for the characters. People are more likely to care about characters with a low emo vibe. A gay leader is interesting, but you should have more depth to him than the usual gay outcast persona. Why was he kicked out? What sort of homelife does he come from? And so on.

What about his friends? They might be real to you because you know the people you based them on, but make sure you have them be real to your readers, too. I sort of recommend not actually basing characters on real people as that has potential to cause problems, so keep that in mind.

Hope all this helps. ^__^

thanks... well the leader has the ability to create force fields and turn in and out of this reality(making things able to go through him) and the others are wway to many to say specially me being sick lol

The leader's powers sound cool. Instead of saying "turning in and out of reality" (if things are passing through him), try saying his power is density control or phasing?

How many other characters are there? Because starting out, the less characters to wrangle, the easier it will be focusing on the plot. If you give your readers too much, it might turn them off. I'd say having five (including the leader) is a good start.. and adding more in sequels.

Edited to add: There's a rpg book out by White Wolf Games called Aberrant that might help with powers and how powers should work. The book has a pretty good list and explainations.