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ghostPastry 05-26-2010 02:14 AM

This is such a good story! :eager:

The_Crow 05-26-2010 02:17 AM

Mike thinks that everyone... his brother, his mother and father, his classmates, the teacher, the school nurse, the doctor... the whole world was against him, and thought he was crazy.

On the way home from the Doctor's Office, Mike yells to his Dad "STOP THE CAR!" The same figure in a white hoodie riding a shiny red bicycle down the street to the right. "Dad, please" Mike begged, "This will prove I'm NOT CRAZY!"

Mike hopped out of the Ford Taurus that turned after the figure and chased the person down, heart pounding... he pulls the hoodie back to reveal...

... a very confused little girl.

"That's it, bedtime for you!" his father barks sternly, more convinced than ever that his son is just hallucinating.

Back at home, his mother continues to prod him with a thermometer. "I knew it, 99.6!" his mother exclaimed. "Terrific, when he hits 100 we'll sell!" The younger brother was sitting nearby and with a shrug he said "I don't get it." "It's a joke about stocks." The parents finally make their exit and allow the younger sibling to stay. "It'll be my first time to the river without you!" laments Ben. "Yeah, I'm stuck in bed and everyone thinks I'm a few sandwhiches short of a picnic." "By the way, was that joke earlier dirty?" "Nah, just a boring grown up thing."

Getting back to plans, Mike tells Ben that if he wakes him up, he'll go to the river too. "You'll be fine anyways, you'll have your friends." "Just like you used to have Ricky"

Waking Mike up was thwarted. "Forgot your tackle-box? You KNOW it's in the garage! Has EVERYBODY here gone wacky?!" Dad said as he ushered the little brother down to the car.

As a last-ditch effort Ben threw pebbles at Mike's bedroom window to no avail. But some odd minutes later, a youthful, ghostly whisper could be heard.

"Miiiiike.
Miiiike!"


[To Be Continued]

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 02:24 AM

*paws at Crow* More more! I hate cliffhangers so! ;-;

The_Crow 05-26-2010 02:27 AM

Mike was feeling a strange flux of emotions: confused, scared, depressed, even angry! At first when he looked out the window, there was nothing... then "Mike, come out!".

Hurriedly slipping his jeans over his boxers, the distraught teen yelled "I'm sick of this!" and then went outside and started yelling for his friend. "Ricky! Ricky!! RICKY!!!"

The figure, alittle less ghostly said, "Here I am, Mike"

" 'Here I am?! Just like that?! What the hell do you want from me?!?" he reached to grab Ricky's shoulders to find that... they were solid.

Meanwhile, at the river...

[To be continued...]

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 02:29 AM

Ricky's alive?! :O *wiggle wiggle impatient for more*

Dottie Mae Evans 05-26-2010 02:34 AM

Wow, my name is on the topic's title! :D I feel special! :D

I am back from a Young Democrats meeting. :P

Hm... Is the glitch fixed? I mean where you donate to the opposite team and get their item?

The_Crow 05-26-2010 02:36 AM

Ben and his pre-pubescent crew of friends were at the park, on the way to the river. "Hey, isn't that the bridge where your brother's friend got killed?" one of the munchkins asked. Being the only person who actually secretly believed his brother, he played the card of changing the subject "Let's just keep going, I don't want to hear about Ricky anymore."

Once at the river, getting ready to cast his line, Ben accidentally knocked over his friend's soda can that was balanced precariously on a rock. "Sorry, it was an accident." The vengeful boy then took Ben's bobber and threw it way upstream "Hey, what was that for?" A sarcastic reply answerd "Sorry, another 'accident". Feeling dejected, Ben began the hunt for his bobber...

Meanwhile, Mike couldn't believe his hands, "I tried to save you!" he pleaded with the ghost desperately, "If that wasn't good enough, do whatever you want to me."

Ricky replied, "I'm not here to hurt you, I'm here to warn you."

With a roll of his eyes in disbelief "WARN me?! What's so important..."

But Mike was cut off by a one-word answer... "Ben."

[To be continued. Who's still enjoying the story?"]

Flish 05-26-2010 02:39 AM

*wiggles* Come on, Grampa! Kinny must know what happens next!

Rainbows 05-26-2010 02:40 AM

o_o *stares*
I want to read, but.. But..!
[to be continued...]

:feesh:

Doomfishy 05-26-2010 02:43 AM

Why hello thar, fellow Sprocketeers. xD

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 02:45 AM

I'm still enjoying it! I NEED MORE! DDDD: *pokes Crow's shoulder*

Hiya, Doomfishy! Threw some gears at you. ;D

The_Crow 05-26-2010 02:46 AM

The Ghost of Ricky continued explaining, "He's in danger, I tried to tell you yesterday at school. He's at the bridge- my bridge".

Not knowing how to get there, Ricky handed over his precious Shiny Red Bicycle in mint condition to Mike. "Get going, It's a long ride and we don't want Ben on this side just yet!"

Mike peddled as fast as he could, having to keep a standing position on the bicycle whose size he long outgrew. His muscle memory of riding along his old favourite route did not fail him.

Ben's foot was caught between two rocks. "Guys! Hey Guys!" he yelled back to his friends. Chances are they didn't hear him, but if they did, they were still ignoring him for being a sissy, or giving him payback for knocking over the precious cold soda on a warm afternoon. Ben was getting frantic, and it was time for the park-keeper to release the torrents of water yet again. With his wrench, he begain the manual mechanism, crank by crank to allow the water to come tearing down the normally mild stream, with Ben absolutely helpless to the water's wrath...

[To Be Continued ;) ]

Flish 05-26-2010 02:51 AM

Mooooore! *flails* This is getting really good!

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 02:52 AM

Noooooo, Ben!!!! D: More, please! *o*

The_Crow 05-26-2010 02:54 AM

"AAAH! HELP!" Ben cried for his life, but his screams did not fall on deaf ears, for Mike had shown up at the new, sturdy bridge just in time with a shiny 'danger' sign. He was haunted by echoes from the past, screams, and pleas to Ricky to hold on. He threw the bicycle against the green grass and hopped after his brother.

With his superior strength, Mike was able to move the rocks that trapped his only younger brother's sprained or broken ankle and they jumped to the side just as the waterfall splashed past them, spraying droplets soaking their clothes but nothing else. Mike wrapped his jacket around Ben and noticed on the grass a rusted bicycle with bent up tire frames. The very next day a fisherman found the remains of Ricky's body. Why had it taken so long for Ricky and his bicycle to be found? Most likely because he wasn't down in the river, but instead he was waiting to pay back a favour to his best friend. Mike was able to do for Ben what he couldn't do for Ricky despite his best effort- saved his precious LIFE.

The End.

Flish 05-26-2010 02:58 AM

Ooh... *claps* Kinny likes!

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 03:08 AM

That was a good story. :'D
I love Are You Afraid of the Dark. :heart:

Naoto-chan22 05-26-2010 03:09 AM

*makes maybe a late reply*
Papa I loved you story even if Mike didn't have any "fun" with Ricky ^_^

The_Crow 05-26-2010 03:10 AM

That's actually my favourite episode. I mean you could argue that all of them could be true, but I really believe in ghosts, and of all the stories, a ghost holding on to pay back a favour, even if it scares the shizza out of his old friend at first, I believe that that could truly happen in real life, so for me, that makes it the best story... because it's actually something believeable.

Naoto-chan22 05-26-2010 03:13 AM

The Clown one made me afraid of clowns along with it :ninja:

ghostPastry 05-26-2010 03:14 AM

Yeah, I definitely agree with that. :> The more realistic it is, the creepier it is. That episode came out the year I was born, and the show scared the hell out of me as a small child, so it wasn't until many years later, in middle school (the same time I started watching Zim and first saw The Nightmare Before Christmas), that I actually got to see the show for realz.

I really like the way you told the story tho, Crow. :'D <3

Naoto-chan22 05-26-2010 03:18 AM

Papa didn't have to make it slightly sound like so boyXboy was gonna happen and get my hopes up

Mama you are looking quite dashing tonight

The_Crow 05-26-2010 03:19 AM

Nao-chan- He was screaming the name of his DEAD friend... that really means that there's not going to be boyxboy action happening!

Flish 05-26-2010 03:19 AM

*bounces on Grampa's lap* Grampa, can I have another story!

Red_Hope 05-26-2010 03:21 AM

Hey everyone XD


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