Ziv Xanthus's Profile

Ugh. I might consider myself lucky if I wasn't so busy freaking out about everything. I have Psych, Anthro, English and Math. The first two seem like they could be interesting, but it's starting really REALLY slow. English is boring and Math is... Math.

Stressing out over school, basically. I started last monday. D=

So besides this whatcha doing with your summer?

=D Yay! Glad I was helpful and not sounding like a jerk.

Also, there are a few grammar errors, but I don't know if you can edit those or not. They're not huge and glaring or anything, but I thought I'd point them out for future reference, I guess.

Well, since it's the prologue you'd want it to be short and to the point, right? You don't want to loose the reader's interest before you've even gotten to the story. It doesn't seem that it's going that way with yours, but like I said because of the update schedule it's hard to tell.
And especially since it's a slow update schedule I'd try and make each page end with something that will stay with the reader while they wait for the next page. I know the prologue is meant to be expositional, but you don't want to lose readers while waiting for the next update. For example, the Hope line on the first page did it well, where as the third page "I was right" would have been done well if it hadn't been shoved over to the bottom of the page. This last page did it well too.

(Yours right?) My main concern with it would really be pacing, but because of the update schedule it's hard to really tell. I like it so far! =D

Lameo. This does sound better. But then again, when is Mene /not/ better? xD

Oh are they just standard BBCode forums?

Oh is there a forum and stuff on there too? I don't really want to risk abandoning Mene again since I'm still running the contest and am now running an rp. I don't want to be lame and abandon them. =\