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New Poem |need some critiques|
so yeah I made a poem and I already got some critiques about how I stick too much to the traditional style of poetry.I just need some more opinions to develop my writing,any feedbacks are welcome.
Sleep The dawn has come and it’s time to rest From all the day’s work we did our best We deserve a goodnight sleep Forget all the tears and weep But as midnight strikes, it’s wise you’re asleep, We still have energy to keep This night, sleep tight, I’ll close the light I won’t let you get out of my sight With my words I should say What I feel is not a kid’s play In my words you should trust, Every letter is a must. I’ll be with you whenever you need me Just wait for the right time and you’ll see As I end my poem written for you I’ll let you know my heart is for you With you I will never be astray And we will keep it that way I will love you unlike any other And show you we’re meant to be lovers Salvation has come, how long it was gone? Now that you’re here is there anything to fear? My love for you can wait, it was never too late This is something I would like to call fate My feelings for you will never fade Just trust everything I said I can assure you even at forever’s end My love for you will remain pure, untouched, reserved Until we merge into one thanks |
I personly don't care about how the other people say about traditionly poetry but I think it is beautiful. You should keep writing poems. Good job!
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