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beedabeet 08-01-2009 07:36 AM

Book Character, Rough, Feedback Needed
 
This is the main character for a book I am currently writing, called Kira is DEAD: Path of Dante'. She's incredibly fierce, and stubborn. Kira will stop at nothing to protect her friends:http://i125.photobucket.com/albums/p...athOfDante.jpg

I haven't colored her yet (I use paint.net) because I haven't decided on what background I'm going to draw yet. I'd really appreciate some feedback. I don't mind if people are harsh. I know Kira isn't exactly anatomically correct, as her legs are too long. It's a certain new style that I've been doing with all of my art, a style that is a bit of a "Work In Progress". Thanks for any feedback you have.

linkfreak131 08-01-2009 03:00 PM

Yeah, you're definitely right about your anatomy; I can see a lot of mistakes in it. The head angle is also wrong. If the body is at that angle, then the head would not be perfectly strait, towards the viewer like that, unless your character has the power to move her head in any way she wants?

The hair is also kind of strange looking. I know you're trying to create a scene of movement in it, but it's not quite working out; the really long part of her hair would not go that far in front like that; it's just too heavy. It would stay towards the back more.

Hope that helps you out. ^^

Maka-chan 08-01-2009 06:35 PM

i like it!keep up the good work.the proportion looks good to me ^^
for me i always draw the proportion weird ._.

beedabeet 08-14-2009 06:49 PM

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Originally Posted by linkfreak131 (Post 1764697738)
Yeah, you're definitely right about your anatomy; I can see a lot of mistakes in it. The head angle is also wrong. If the body is at that angle, then the head would not be perfectly strait, towards the viewer like that, unless your character has the power to move her head in any way she wants?

The hair is also kind of strange looking. I know you're trying to create a scene of movement in it, but it's not quite working out; the really long part of her hair would not go that far in front like that; it's just too heavy. It would stay towards the back more.

Hope that helps you out. ^^

Thank you so much! I've already started to draw a newer, better version of the character. Your advice really helped.

Bunbun_chompper 08-14-2009 08:13 PM

The face could be made a little more real.

Anrie Talis 08-14-2009 09:47 PM

OK, there is some work to be done, kinda cool to hear that you're working on it again and trying to fix things up.

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Originally Posted by linkfreak131
The head angle is also wrong. If the body is at that angle, then the head would not be perfectly strait, towards the viewer like that, unless your character has the power to move her head in any way she wants?

I don't really agree with that point there. Just because her face is towards the audience, doesn't mean that her body has to be 100% facing forward as well. The neck and spine do allow some movement of where the face is looking towards, compared to where the torso is facing. (I should say neck, spine, and hip really :p)

Now proportions and anatomy need work, with a little on perspective, shading, and the ways of how gravity works (how her hair/clothes should look). Like stated earlier before, the hair is to heavy to be "all" pushed/pulled by the wind like that, it would fan out more, and random strands wound be blown into her face...
Umm, unless she's got some freaky powers or something, her face is far to stiff, and off. A lot of practicing with portraits really helps with that, trust me on this one.
The rest of her proportions are also off. Such as her hands being to small, the main body to small to support such long limbs, and her head a little to big.
And shading, you gave her a shadow on the ground, but her body-contours aren't giving off shadows/blocking light. By doing this it can throw people off...trust me, I know that feeling, cause I did it myself.

As a rough sketch, it's ok. Do a lot of these, rough sketches that is. It really helps with getting the pose right, placing of background and what type of background, what details you what to add/remove, and it really helps with not having such a stiff subject.
Take a good look at real life and sketch/doodle from it, magazines for poses perhaps, books and that handy thing we call the internet on "how to's" and tutorials, asking those you know who are also artists isn't so bad either. Ummm, other then that, I hope it helps.


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