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Random poety
I was wondering if anyone could give me constructive criticism?
One Last Word Hold me tight before you go; I hide the tears I’ll never show; Whether we’re lovers or not; Together we’ll breeze through life’s lot; Guide me through the murky sea; You carry a copy of my key; My heart will cry and call; Please catch me if I fall; Even if you don’t love me; In my heart forever you’ll be. Library of Memories Enticing whispers, Forgotten books, Crumpled letters, Guilty looks. Look around, Depression hits, Diaries gone, Crying fits. Pictures hanging, Faces fade, Colours blend, Canvas frayed. Old lovers, New friends, Lost ones, Never ends. Love-notes here, Burned there, Try remembering, Don’t care. Torn pages, Scattered round, Cobwebs hanging, No sound. Shattered dreams, Grasping hooks, Enticing whispers, Forgotten books. Toy Store I look in a crowd, no dolls I see there Humans look around, we return their stare We're porcelain girls in masquerade Tired of being left out on parade. We wish for little girls, who'll dress us up Take us out, have parties with tea cups Show us off, with laughs and smiles Without the threat of toils and trials. Dresses of lace, satin, and embroidery fair Compliment our most angelic hair Pink tint lips and rosy cheeks From rigid eyes no tears shall leak. A little girl shyly walks by Quiet and still we all lie She smiles and picks up a girl And gives her hair a little curl. Freed she waves a silent goodbye A sign of hope for those on shelf up high But now she has a new focus in mind A little girl and her fate are intertwined. |
I wrote this today in class... Kind of a scribble, but I actually like it. Kind of a poem/song thingy... Criticism please!
Beside me Devil's on my back, God's laughing off his ass, The Angels are shuffling cards, Demons placing bets, Look at my hand, I can't win But I'm not going anywhere As long as your here beside me Your hands on my shoulder Your light surrounds me I feel so warm inside You save me When hope is lost You stand by me Angels float by lazily, Demons pretending to care, Try to get into my head I just need to know that you're there, In my corner On my side Give me hope Be my guide I stand here, Open to the world, My soul in my eyes, My heart on my sleeve, I've lost my mind But you found it again You found it again You found me again. |
Woke up this morning and this was in my head.. Must write...type, it down..
Untitled (for now) Paint splattered clothes Wind ruffled hair I'm not much to look at baby but your still here. We stand in the rain With slicked back hair A kiss under the stars The secrets we share. I'm with you You're with me We have eachother thats all we need One more dance One more song One more kiss before nights gone. Who can imagine What tomorrow will bring Soft skies of blue Or lightning that rings. Whatever happens I just know We'll be there to make it though. |
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