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Remembrance
Sup y'all. Written for a school poetry project, but based on a little story I read.
Remembrance When the moon dangles high in a velvet black sky I gaze on outside to mark a forest nearby And, along with the trees, there's a man I can see wand'ring through the green and searching, it seems For something, some key to some lost memory from before he forgot forgot, about me. |
Nicely done. Excellent rhythm and the flow is pretty much flawless. You're punctuation seems to be consistent which is also good. And the slight twist at the end is neat.
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