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Violet Reverie 09-05-2009 06:47 PM

Despair- A Poem I Wrote When My Parents Passed Away -
 
One day they were there

Laughing, living, loving

Without warning

the birds of death

descend upon them.

Uncaring, cold, taking

Then they were no longer there

Laughing, living, or loving.

A black restlessness descends

Leaving, staying, despair

A rock crumbled to sand.

A house torn down.

Leaving, staying, despair.

Inability to cry, ability only to lie.

Laughing, living, loving

What is real, the lie or the lie?

What to let everyone see?

Laughing, living, loving;leaving, staying, despair.

What face to wear?



** This poem was written after I lost both of my parents, my mom died suddenly on Feb 15 of '09 and my dad passed away ten days later after having been diagnosed with lung cancer the previous thanksgiving **

Hayzel 09-05-2009 07:20 PM

It's slightly cliche with those few repeated phrases over and over again, but otherwise it's a good poem. Just be careful to not overuse a word or phrase in a poem. It happens easily.


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