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WhiteSerenade's Story Spot *No actual title yet*
I guess I'm going to be working on a new project... I just don't quite know the them yet. Something dark and morbid yet something heart enlightening with humor and romance in it. And I still don't know what to name it yet. Oh well. On with the beginning.
The Awful Beginning Shadows creep, darkness ensues and the only light is the moon and the reflection of your silhouette dancing off those golden, predatory eyes. That is all you notice, for all around you are the depths of the dark, twisted-looking trees; yet you only notice those murderous eyes. As you start to back away, you find yourself stuck; frozen with fear. Each breath you take the creature moves foward with its demonic eyes. Its one step away from you and as it reaches for you, you open your mouth to scream, but can't. Nothing will come out. The creature smiles a very wide and very toothy grin, filled with dagger-like teeth and-! That's when everything goes black. No more eyes. No more smile. No more nothing. Just a pure black void. Now... Wake up. ---X-x-X--- So how is it so far? |
It makes me think of a nightmare where you are standing alone in a forest and a wolf is creeping up on you :shock:
I liked it :D |
Yay, new people in the Lit. forum!
I’ve always been a little critical of second-person stories, so if I come off a little snappish, I sincerely apologize before hand. --- Quote:
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--- As un-fond as I am of second-person stories (the exception being, of course, choose-your-own adventure stories. But that’s mostly because those tend to be really funny) I actually quite like the way your write. I think you have a good grasp of the ratio of action to description. That being said, I wish you good luck with this. I always felt that second-person is very difficult to write seriously. I think you did a good job with it when you were describing what’s going on around me rather than describing what I’m doing. (As I explained earlier.) Good luck! |
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