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Please tell me what you think
Blackness Inside
Cold and black is my heart All thats left is an ice cold stare All the tears i had are now dried up The blood in my veins flowing black Ice cold to the touch The living dead is what I am What once drove me on is now killing me What once saved me now is condemning me A blackness is taking over And theres no saving me now Please tell me honestly what you think of this, I can take any criticism that you have and any advice that you have and I will take it to heart |
/standing applause. Can i borrow your creativity for creative writing please?!!?!
I really like it. Do you have any more? |
I have more on my gaia account, 'cept they are all on the depressing side. You can use it if you like
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I need help with a title
Through those tired eyes you see the world crumbling
With the worn hands you hold yourself Not feeling safe anywhere but within your own arms The sky burns red from the fires in the city Black smoke rising all around your glass sanctuary As you stand before the vast burning city before you You shed a single tear All this power and triumph And not a single soul to share it with Great general of war You are alone in this world This world you have turned to ashes The world you turned to hell I need help titling this, my creativity kinda ran dry when I got to the title. Any help will be appreciated |
Less_Than_Forgotten, I've merged your two threads and moved them into our Poetry subforum. From now on, please update this thread with all of your new pieces. Each user is only allowed to have one Poetry topic. :yes:
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Thank you, I'm still really new to this
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Very good, like always, Megankins.
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Thank you Sera
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Your welcome ^-^
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whats with the dog?
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