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AkiraOhba 10-06-2009 10:39 PM

working progress, i need feed back you can be as mean as you want ^^
 
“The Carnival of Nightmares”
By: Akira Ohba
Chapter 1: The beginning.
‘Have you ever been to a carnival? Not your normal carnival but the carnival of nightmare. This which comes and goes like the phases of the moon in a black sky hovering above every one, the carnival for the strange distant, psychotic, the place were if you’re an out cast or loner you’ll fit in like a drop of water.’
Young girl read it a few times more then sighed pulling her motorcycle helmet; which she had customized her self, off her hair falling to her shoulders. This was October Aaronson 18 one of the few more ‘gothic’ kids in her small town. Shoulder long pin strait midnight black hair, thin naturally porcelain skin thick black eyeliner and bright red lipstick slightly fading. A band tee-shirt tight showing her curves or lack there of a pair of neon green pants that look like they were painted on, then to top it off her signature Harley Davidson leather jacket and her favorite black combat boots, paired with fingerless leather gloves and a pentagram necklace. No piercings accept her ears which were gauged to 8, no tattoos.
She sighed re-reading it again thinking that maybe she’d miss read it for what now would be the third time. But she didn’t and ripped it off the telephone pole scanning for a time and date as she had nothing to do for the next week. Near the bottom in bold letters it read:
‘One day only 10~31~2006 fair ground parks’
Smiling faintly thinking ‘Cool finally this town got something interesting’ her tongue licked her lip lightly as she slipping her helmet on again slammed it closed got on her Triumph Speed Triple and drove to the carnival. She paid her way in upon arrival walking in to a thick fog and a large crowd of people. This place was more on the adult side with Voodoo shop after voodoo shop, a few stands having shrunken heads. Satanic ritual shops and more shops then she could register. After a while of shopping around buying a few things she was pulled in to a crimson tent were she sat in the close front alone. The lights dimmed slightly no one around here as most of the people here were from her high school. The curtain lifted to show at all man in a red cape.
“Hello ladies and gentlemen” Announcer Mike said in a loud booming voice that made October’s bag on the floor move slightly. “Tonight you will witness the re-birth of fear the re-birth of the paranormal” He paused for a second building tension when his pudgy face changed to complete seriousness “I ask that the squeamish and all Christians leave now” As he said this his face and body quaked slightly.
His face bubbled imploded grotesquely till the skin melted, layers of fat fell to the floor in steaming layers along with his body till he was a younger blond boy, looking exactly like the boy in the front row who looked petrified and bolted.
“NOW Bitches and bustards sit the fuck down and watch the show” He screamed in the same booming voice as black fire exploded on the stage making announcer Mike disappear in the blue hue smoke which quickly disappeared to show a small girl.
Mind control Sarah had long bright blond hair and big blue eyes bright cheeks and a tan with a bright white dress that seemed to illuminate the dark room as the hot spot light hit her. With out saying a word and smiling happily dancing a little her hands behind her back, some one stopped in mid word got up walking to the stage in a kind of stopper pupils wide. With out a word Sarah just twirled her finger and beamed and the guy began turning doing the chicken dance. After a few more minutes of complete humiliation from Sarah her twin sister Levitation Cassandra who dyed her hair black and wore all black walked on stage lifting the guy in to the air passing him above the crown setting him back in his seat as Mind control Sarah snapped her fingers and he continued talking as if nothing had happened.
The two girls disappeared from stage in a shadow which got bigger and bigger till a girl walked out of it this would be Shadow queen Kiki in all black with her trench coat and blood red hair. Portals formed all around her as she said in her whisper in the wind tone “I need volunteers” A few people raised there hands as a joke shadow portals forming and they appeared on stage then she disappeared through hers grabbing people as she went till they all were somewhere elts one in the high stands another on the tight rope, they fell in to a portal and crashed back on to their seats. Shadow queen Kiki smiled faintly slowly sinking through the floor. By now the room of 40 or so was down to 10 and that was quick to drop as the next act walked out.
Tattooed Toru he was bald and covered head to toe in every kind of nature tattoo from bugs actual size to a colored dragon that toot up most of his back and stomach. He wasn’t wearing any thing; a few people laughed blushing and left quickly. He didn’t say anything just looked around flicking a small butterfly on his right for arm. Slowly it picked its wings up flapping them like it’d just immerged out of its cocoon, then started flying around as he released birds other bugs, even a Japanese symbol here and there showing a beautiful girl for beauty and a rose for love which he held in his hand so it wouldn’t not disappear. He released snakes what seemed like a thousand butterflies a baby rabbit, each time one was released his skin would clear, till only the dragon was left. Near the end of his act ever so slightly hi touched the dragon which ripped off with ease as the others came back leaving only his chest bear as the dragon circled the room screaming loud roars and blowing fire. Till it came back to its owners chest and Tattooed Toru walked away off stage as the room got brighter the room emptied more to 7 or so.
There was a faint tap on the floor as Animal Rage walked on stage in his tattered light brow pants and no shirt grey hair and ice blue eyes. In his proud tone he knelt down to a boy in the front row who was still in shock at Tattooed Toru and Animal Rage asked “You kid what’s your favorite animal?” The boy took a few seconds then said in a small voice “A cat” Rage smiled faintly getting on all fours as his skin bubbled and sprouted fur in a nasty looking way along with loud snaps as he shrunk and turned in to a Siamese cat meowing a few times. Then a few more loud snaps as he turned into a grey wolf howled and jumped off stage. The room emptied to 3 or 4.
Finally the lights went out completely except for the hot spot light on Announcer Mike as he walked up on stage his loud booming voice said “Lastly to end our show we have Demon Draven, please I must ask for your own safety please do not get up. You can say he has a hot temper”
October Sighed heavily thinking to her self as blue flames shot from the floor a guy in the center of the stage. The lights were turned on to a dim as the boy flicked his hands black flames instantly irrupting. Demon Draven had black red tinted hair as if it was soaked with blood no shirt, black pants no shoes his feet in stead were chained to the floor with silver links. His chest was badly burnt scared and had a gothic cross on his back that lined with his back bone. “I need some one” He scoffed harshly like he had something elts he could be doing.
There were no volunteers this time no hands raised as a joke in the thick hot air, it may have had something to do with the fact that not a single person in the audience wasn’t slightly scared. Maybe it was something in the human body that detected pure evil, maybe not but what ever the fact was he sighed, annoyed glaring daggers at October.
“You girl with the black hair” He said flicking a small flame to October which she blew out and got up walking swiftly to the stage.
“What is your favorite color?” he sighed utterly annoyed looking her, his eyes pitch black.
“Purple” She scoffed
He smiled faintly closing his fist to extinguish the black flame he was holding and grabbed her arm with an icy hand as purple ice cold flames irrupted all around her like a sort of wind blowing her hair and the edges of her clothes. Some one laughed getting in up heading to the exit, Demon Draven glared at them pulling his arm away from October and flicked his hand to the door as the man reached it there was a loud simmer and a crack filled with the mans screams, the room filled with smoke and the smell of flesh being burnt. The lights went off completely October was pushed off the low stage landing hard on her back as flames exploded everywhere waking it completely visible. Shadow queen Kiki Mind control Sarah and Announcer Mike were around him tying to grabbed him as Draven screamed in this tone that sent a shiver down Octobers spin “Welcome to the freak show kids!” then stared to laugh psychotically till Tattooed Toru hit him over the head.
Shadow queen Kiki Mind control Sarah and Tattooed Toru took Draven off stage as the light came on; they went out when Draven went unconscious. Announcer Mike cleared his throat loudly “Shows over every one” Every one quickly ran out excluding October who walked back to her stand getting her helmet and bags then walked out a thick almost pliable fog hung in the air still, and it still smelt like chemicals with a soap taste. October sighed her head slightly dizzy no one was around the sound of metal braking from some were in the carnival as a shadow portal opened in front of her and Shadow queen Kiki stepped out.
“Hello” She mumbled in her tone that was like a whisper in the wind
“Hi” October blinked
“I’m Shadow queen Kiki”
“Nice name, but I’m gunna leave” October said walking past her when something cold grabbed her wrist pulling her back.
“You can’t leave” Demon Draven said all most nicely now wearing a Vans sweater smiling his eyes a light blue.
“Piss off” She snapped ripping her arm from his grip and quickly walked to the exit when another portal jumped up, Draven again in front of her. She sighed heavily looking at him “WHAT?” she yelled “His other contacts were cooler” she thought
“I’m Draven and I would like to interest you in your wildest fantasies. I want you to join the carnival of nightmares” He said with a childish smile and a slight bow.
She sighed faintly eyeing him over something welling in her stomach; she pushed it off and itched the back of her neck as she said “Fine”
“Cool what’s your name?”
“Clair”
“Bull shit what do you think I was born yester day!” he scoffed
“Draven chill out” Shadow queen Kiki said quickly
“October Aaronson”
“Was that so fucking hard and last names don’t matter here” he paused seeming to be lost in thought Creepy October… No that’s gay” He blinked then shrugged turning to Kiki “Were Magic Marry?”
“On the farcies weal”
“Electric Eric?” Draven asked
“Powering the farcies weal” Kiki sighed
Demon Draven smiled again lightly grabbing October’s hand leading her deep in to the Carnival as he said “You have to meet people you good with names?”
“NO” October blinked
Most of these people were at the freak show like:
Shadow queen Kiki; she was the more of the out spoken Goth girl, always wore black nothing more no color ever just her blood red hair. And her signature black leather skin tight trench coat. Her perfect hour glass shape hidden under the mass of her clothes and her looses Tripp pants with the soft clink of the chains as she walked by. Usually wearing heals or her converses, she had the greenest eyes in the world, a dark emerald green that were some how ice cold and warm at the same time.
Announcer Mike; no one really knew what he looked like as he’s a shape shifter the only thing that stays the same is his voice that warm loud booming voice like he swallowed a microphone.
Tattooed Toru; Bald small frame light brown almond shaped eyes his hair when he’s to lazy to shave was a dark brown as well. When he wasn’t performing he actually wore clothes the cheep what ever he could find at a thrift store. He was nice funny at times hade a loud accent, he was born in Japan, and he was lazy as all holly hell.
Animal Rage; his name is actually Rage no one including him knew why, but it was. He had grayish hair and electric eyes always turned in to a wolf, as that was his favorite animal in the world. But the more he did it the more it was more defined; he once grew eras had them for a week or two never shut up about them.
The twins Levitation Cassandra; the older twin she was the more dark twin dyed her hair black with bright blue eyes wearing a black dress just like her sisters. Mind control Sarah; bright blond hair bright blue eyes wearing a white dress, they usually stay to them selves.
Electric Eric; light bond hair with some dark gray he was older kept the carnival going as he controlled electricity. He never really came out of his locked trailer, roomer has it he had a few kids who he never talked to, and another roomer was he only came out to get food when every one was asleep.
Magic Marry; This was a wired name as she didn’t have any magic powers she controlled sex drive and hormones, more of like a gypsy. She had orange hair tied back in a bandana with light gold eyes. She was nice caring and rather old in her late 70’s.
Demon Draven; black red tinted hair on the more short side as it’s usually charred to it’s short chin length. Usually had light blue eyes when using had black eyes, also when using he gets psychotic as he’s using his demon side. Normally he’s rather childish.
CH 1 END


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