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Locked up :|
In the back of my head
I see your face All the lies you told and the past i cant replace I never wanted to be with you but still you made me you locked me up why cant you just let me be After you locked me up you forgot about me Barley ever came back you just throw away the key I felt trapped and lonely All i did was cry No one ever helped me I wanted to die. But one day i stopped allmy crying all my complaing all my whining I stood up for myself I broke free from the chains and you I noticed how much happier lif was and all the things i could do Life is better without chains and locks without you telling me what to do you always told me you loved me But i never did love you. |
I really like it mainly because I understand where you're coming from. I got a little teary eyed XD *embarrassed* .. anyway I think you did a good job. I think you could add a bit more creativity to it. But overall a good job, a good display of emotions ^^
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Can I criticize, please?~ well, the main fact is that: is totally untrue that you didn't love that person. As I understand there is a lover, and lovers are best friends too [[I don't know how much this applies for you]] it is too harsh to say that you never loved that person. you both shared the same love, you still love or, now, you lost hope and don't WANT to love anymore. that is something else~ ________ In rest, i really love this poem, is really really good~ same here, almost crying :( I mean, i felt the emotions coming from the poem. this is really a nice job~<3 |
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