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many poems
ok i write poems pretty short most of the time so please dont hate me when they are only three or four lines. but anyways heres all the ones i wrote over winter break. none of them have titles because i dont put any titles onto my works.
you see me now you see me not confused and lonely i hope you rot roses are red violets are not trapped in a web of lies i am caught darkness is lonely sunlight may sting crying helps sometimes but thats not enough for me what is love what is hate what is that girl thinking oh no its too late ok that was all the short poems i came up with over break. now for the kinda long ones that took awile to think about... why are you there and i am here why cant i see you why dont you come out why do you stay in the dark why are you eating me oh, i see thank you my soul she is crying crying crying she wants to be heard she wants people to hear her words crying all day and all night sick and tired of waiting in lines sick and tired of these stupid rhymes crying to protect crying to reject crying to get all she can get why cant i stop your crying all day and all night crying crying with no end in sight through the night i hear him call he wants my blood not some but all he looked so caring and so sweet until he knocked me off my feet he watched me close and carried me slow to the dock to let me know it was over it already had been he was my brethren, my blood, my kin comment and rate fairly please!hope you enjoyed ^^" |
I'll be moving this on over to the poetry subforum where it belongs. :yes:
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Okay, so you said you had many poems, but all I see is one long wall of text with line breaks. Make some indencation as to where one ends and the next beings and I'll consider critiquing it...
Also, titles serve a lot of purpose. I highly suggest using them because they give insight to a poem; set the mood before anything's ever even started. The title is the real eye cather and what first draws your reader to your work. So think about it... ;) |
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