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Poetry Feedback
Hey people! Ok here's what I'm gonna do. I'm gonna post one of my poems at least once or twice a week (if I remeber :|) and I would like to hear some feedback from you guys!
:arrow: Broken Hearts When I reach out To someone for company They push me aside My heart breaks once When love is in my grasp But when i try to share My heart breaks twice When I cry for help They ignore my pleas My heart breaks thrice Now my heart breaks A hundred times fold My heart breaks more When I think about these breaks Now my life has ended Just so I can take my broken heart To a place where it will no longer break Now I look down To see those I know I can see regret Not taking my hand Not sharing my love Not helping me up ((this was one of the first one's I wrote so it aint very good :()) ---------- ok here's another one :arrow: Guardians Tale During the long dark times Guardians wrote the tales Deep in the Pits of Time Of the hero's throughout time The ink from pens on parchment Forming words of their tales That shall forever be rembered By those that read them One lone guardian Writes on parchment alone He writes of the unfamous The heros easily forgotten Alone at a desk With pen in hand The lone guardian Wrote of a hero Forgotten to all but him One who knew the tales The tales of time He travelled from place to place And told his tales Some asked why not once But time and time again Why he has not told tales Of wisdom and strength Time and time again He gives them the same reply Then says nothing more And continues with his tales The lone guardian Was asked by the others Time and time again Why won't he write Of the higher deeds One day of light Broke through the darkness And the long dark days All came to a end The lone guardian Was nowhere to be found All that remained was his scrolls And his last piece of parchment That held his last drops of ink The words thin lines Were loud and clear Paoinfully remebering the words The hero's of wisdom and strength Are remembered by mind But those of smaller deeds Are remembered by heart |
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